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Susan
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0 posted 2005-05-22 10:47 AM


The willow weeps her tear leaves
into the glistening silver pool
that stands there just beyond her roots
which are planted deep
in this soil of her belonging

she sees her wind songs reflected
as the breeze stirs her branches
and moves her longing
speaking words to her of other worlds
that lay within the silvered waters

what temptations were whispered
by this silver pool of promises
with his sky eye shimmers
that beseeched her attention
and spoke of depths to be fathomed

She reached forth and touched the pool
its waters warm and welcoming
touched by an amber sun
yet shaded in the shadows
and the ripples can be felt as of yet

But the bank held her firmly
in the soil of her beginnings
and she knew she was a tree
that dreamt of being a fish
and dreams can only be dreams

So she shed her leaf tears
to ripple within the pool of wishes
for if wishes were fishes . . .
but she, she was a willow of standing
and she let her roots sink deeper

into the soil of her belonging

s.a.t.

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

© Copyright 2005 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2005-05-22 10:51 AM


Susan
A simply lovely write.  

Susan
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2 posted 2005-05-22 10:54 AM


thank you Sy

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Martie
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3 posted 2005-05-22 11:05 AM


Susan

Me thinks there is a good lesson within the thoughts of this poem.  Very lovely!  

Margherita
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4 posted 2005-05-22 03:02 PM


I could picture this so easily, a very beautiful fantasy with deep meaning.

When we are true to ourselves, we are stronger.

But dreaming is necessary to savour fully life.

Love, Margherita

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5 posted 2005-05-22 03:17 PM


Susan, I can't tell you the memories this poem brings up for me, and here is what I envisioned.  This tree holds so many years of memories, and see how she reaches?  I bet she does think she's a fish too!  A lesson learned to reach for the stars?

What an incredible image you penned here and in my mind.  This made my day!

~* C'est la vie *~

froggy
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6 posted 2005-05-22 04:03 PM


Beautiful read.

:-)

<^^> Today the pond....Tomorrow the world

Susan
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7 posted 2005-05-22 04:59 PM


thank you my friends, am so pleased you have enjoyed - an yes, Mysteria, that is the perfect picture for what was in my mind's eye as well - thanks dear -

hugs to you all - and love  - S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

passing shadows
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8 posted 2005-05-22 07:09 PM


stunningly beautiful
inkedgoddess
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9 posted 2005-05-22 09:51 PM


i see them weeping over
into the pond
pretending no one else can see them

Sunshine
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10 posted 2005-05-22 09:55 PM


Pungent metaphor, Susan...
excellent work, here.

May I library it?

Ah, thank you!

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?  Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises...

S Arthur Grey
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11 posted 2005-05-23 12:26 PM


Weeping, tears, roots, other worlds . . .
I can relate.
Oh, can I relate!
Wish I could tell you how much!

Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2005-05-23 07:56 AM


psssst beware of beavers

wink

kewl stuff suzzie

Susan
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13 posted 2005-05-23 10:17 AM


Thank you each for your kind reply and for taking time to leave your mark -

Sunny - of course, thank you!

Hugs to you all - and my warm -

Susan

btw - D - you smile me

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2005-05-23 11:19 AM


Susan ~

My Godness, girl! Your words were breath-takinly beautiful! There are so many wondrous facets to your writing ~ and you!

I absolutely loved this poetic offering, Poetess Sparkles!

Loveya!
Linda

babygirlwlove
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15 posted 2005-05-23 11:26 AM


your pen always has this cool, serene touch....

**feeling this, deep**

**babygirL**

**Intoxicant to the SouL**

wranx
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16 posted 2005-05-23 12:27 PM


Yes, as babygirlw/love said...

You captured "serene"

Susan
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17 posted 2005-05-23 01:58 PM


Linda - thank you sweet angel - hugs

Babygrl - thanks my friend, you bless me with your comment -

Wranx -thank you for the echo of your voice-


Hugs all - Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

latearrival
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18 posted 2005-05-24 04:45 PM


   Susan and Mysteria, together you have made my day. What fond memories I have of the Willow and our yard where we brought up six children. I stuck a small branch down by the stream and  it seemed no time before I was taking pictures of them all sitting in the large branches of the Willow. Thanks for this.  martyjo


Susan
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19 posted 2005-05-24 08:24 PM


Martyjo - thanks for sharing the memories - it brings warm to my heart - I've wonderful memories of a willow as I grew up and the tree fort we had in it too - they are one of my most favorite trees - am happy you enjoyed-

hugs - S

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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