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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-05-18 10:05 AM



How long
Has it been
Since she let her hair down

Leaving her desk
The quiet librarian
With lowered eyes


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Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2005-05-18 11:27 AM




maybe too long.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

INclan
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2 posted 2005-05-18 01:45 PM


OUTSTANDING!
passing shadows
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3 posted 2005-05-18 02:18 PM


nice one
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2005-05-18 07:32 PM


I'm in the library right now...using the computer...observing the librarians...James
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5 posted 2005-05-18 09:58 PM


yep,too darn long

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Huan Yi
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6 posted 2005-05-18 10:09 PM



And what if
you put the question mark
at the end of the second line
instead of the third . . .

Different
understanding . . .
yes?


John



Drauntz
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7 posted 2007-04-30 03:18 PM


I love the one in the reply. because I read like that
no tricks on reader! or I will tail along more.

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