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Susan
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0 posted 2005-05-16 10:18 AM


you are temptation
and mist my longing
to taste of you
to sip your offerings
of heart spill
and become drunk
upon the wine
of your mind
and ambrosia
of your heart

you are of the finest vintage
a bouquet of delight
a swirl of color
oh what a sight
what flavor!

Yes, you are temptation
begging a sip

but should I taste
how then could I stop?
for the bottle begs to be drunk
in total—

and I am upon step seven of twelve
and must walk on

s.a.t.

note - this is not about alcohol

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

© Copyright 2005 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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with you
1 posted 2005-05-16 10:39 AM


"Yes, you are temptation
begging a sip

but should I taste
how then could I stop"


how indeed!!
enjoyed

Enchantress
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2 posted 2005-05-16 11:04 AM


Wonderful Susan!!
Very much enjoyed sweet lady~

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
                    -Danny Kaye

Earth Angel
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3 posted 2005-05-16 11:06 AM


Oh, I knew that this intoxicating piece was not about alcolhol!


Linda

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4 posted 2005-05-16 11:08 AM


note - this is not about alcohol

I felt when reading, this is about forbidden love?

Beautifully written, felt the passion and warmth embrace...lovely

Susan
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5 posted 2005-05-16 11:11 AM


Smiling here, my friends - thank you -  

Hugs - Susan

LeeJ - you one smart cookie

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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6 posted 2005-05-16 04:00 PM


Awesome write!

Eric

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7 posted 2005-05-16 06:52 PM


"he" is everyones temptation.....beautifully said....

I came from the mountain
The crust of creation
My whole situtaion-made from clay to stone

EvocativeVerse2
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8 posted 2005-05-16 07:33 PM


Love this one too.
BluesSerenade
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9 posted 2005-05-17 03:47 AM


upon the wine
of your mind
and ambrosia
of your heart

Moving right along, because you too, are like ambrosia, Susan.
And your writing never fails to move the reader in me.

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10 posted 2005-05-17 05:20 AM


beautiful~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2005-05-17 07:19 AM


and then on the morrow
when the day turns around
and you see your footsteps there
in the sand of recognition

will you try them on
and say they are like mine
but they could not be
for that was just a silly dream

and I have never loved this way

step 13..kewl stuff mrs.

Susan
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12 posted 2005-05-17 10:38 AM


thank you friends!  your words, your warm, they smile me.  

Greeneyes - yes  

EV2 - so good to see you my friend!

Bluesie - you are most kind dear -

Eric - you bless me with your eyes

MGroves - thank you for leaving your warmth

D - step 13 - always did like that number

Hugs all -   Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Martie
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13 posted 2005-05-17 01:02 PM


Susan

Enjoyed the honesty in this.  There are many kinds of temptation and you are a strong woman to turn your back on any of them.  

[This message has been edited by Martie (05-17-2005 01:41 PM).]

Susan
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14 posted 2005-05-17 02:09 PM


Martie - thanks for the encouragement and your heart -

  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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