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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-05-12 07:35 AM

"Wake up, lay down"
"wake up ,lay down"
we played a game
and you were half a moon
in 6months size,
little boy laughing
i dreamt you last night
into the hazy hours,
as the sun turns the corner,
then i woke in tears;

a mother feels love,
but we've all grown older,

"wake up, lay down"
i kiss you goodnight
for the umpteenth time,
then woke in a face
of a middle aged moment,
and called my own mother,
grateful, for shared reflections
at the sands of our shadows.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (05-13-2005 11:47 AM).]

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

1 posted 2005-05-12 07:40 AM

inky, this portrays that moment well...so many wonderful lines in this...creative and heartfelt...thank you for sharing this moment, that we've all known so well.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2005-05-12 07:42 AM

playful inky....the soft of you is leaking
into artful love..enjoyed you here

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2005-05-12 08:00 AM

I'm glad you called her, Michele...
you wove this one well.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2005-05-12 08:03 AM

Michelle, this touches to tears...

a beautiful moment captured forever.
Very well done, one of your best ever hon.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2005-05-12 08:04 AM

inkedgoddess
Always nice t talk to mom. Injoyed the write.

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

6 posted 2005-05-13 03:01 PM

This big boy knows what to do....

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

7 posted 2005-05-13 04:49 PM

Perfect sweet lady.
A precious moment captured in time...
~Hugs, Nancy~

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
-Danny Kaye

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

8 posted 2005-05-17 03:51 AM

Oh, geez Michele,
you make me remember
what I should be grateful for.

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

9 posted 2005-05-17 05:18 AM

enjoyed~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

10 posted 2005-05-17 10:49 AM

felt this one - and it was vivid-

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

11 posted 2005-05-17 03:15 PM

Beautiful and poignant... and I'm betting your Mom understood perfectly. *S*

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

12 posted 2005-05-17 03:57 PM

You capture moments in time so vividly in your poetry, that I get flashbacks of them from time to time. You are a poetess extraordinaire!

Through the raising of my own daughters, I have come to appreciate my Mom even more!

Linda

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2005-05-18 08:03 PM

heartfelt write

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

14 posted 2005-05-18 08:40 PM

"then woke in a face
of a middle aged moment,"

love this!!
smiling at the feeling
M

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

15 posted 2005-05-18 10:13 PM

A lovely poem, Ms. Goddess....

Calling your mother was a very good idea, because she is the one who was filled with emotion when you first walked out the door;

This poem is filled with that same kind of emotion.

Malvina Reynolds wrote and sang that emotion in her beautiful song "Turn Around". Perhaps you know the song?

(excerpt)
"Where are you going,
my little one, little one?
Where are you going, my baby, my own?
Turn around and you're two.
Turn around and you're four.
Turn around and you're a young girl
going out of the door."

(use girl or boy, whatever fits)

Your poem reminded me of this song....

Thank you

------------ice
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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

16 posted 2005-05-18 11:12 PM

thanks for reading and understanding

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

17 posted 2005-05-19 05:09 PM

This one moved me so deeply, dear Michele!

It brought memories and emotions.

Moments in the circle of life, captured so beautifully.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

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