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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2005-05-09 09:57 PM



you could
pack me up, if you wish

please...
go ahead

don’t let me stop you

and

as old Clint once said
“make my day”

i would be honoured
though

that you
would hide all of me

there

in a box
inside a closet

but

be sure to place me

behind the
skirts


"we all have wings, but some of us don't know why"

Michael Hutchence (INXS)

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1 posted 2005-05-09 10:03 PM


No...

I'd put you right in the humidor on my desk so I could pull you out and smoke you!  

and with the band on that hat you'd look just like a Cohiba!

Very clever vignette --

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2 posted 2005-05-09 10:29 PM


~smilin' at Reb's reply~
Your writings are always such a treat to read.  Wonderful. Chris

Poetry is an echo, asking a shadow to dance.
~Carl Sandburg

Martie
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3 posted 2005-05-09 11:15 PM


Maree

In a box, no way....right out in the open!!  

Aenimal
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4 posted 2005-05-10 12:41 PM


hide you? never, a priceless work of art must be cherished
Dark Angel
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5 posted 2005-05-10 01:30 AM


Oh you guys, ya'll sweet...I cannot explain where this um write came from exactly, I guess it needed to come out.

um LR? please excuse my ignorance, but what is a Cohiba?

Chris, Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed.

Martie? sighh, love you

oh Bello, I love you too slurp hehe

"we all have wings, but some of us don't know why"

Michael Hutchence (INXS)

Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2005-05-10 08:03 AM


In a box
I think not.....
I'd put ya right out in the open
and hug the heck outa ya!

Gawd, I LOVE your new pic sweetie
you look so carefree and beautiful!

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

bslicker
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7 posted 2005-05-10 08:05 AM


no box
no closet
just you here
being a great writer
in the wide open
BLUE pages
.
.
.
enjoyed
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Sunshine
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8 posted 2005-05-10 08:20 AM



If I could pack you HERE...
I'd put you on display
with the angels...

front and center...

Hugs, baby...
love the new you!



Mama K

LeeJ
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9 posted 2005-05-10 08:30 AM


You belong in a store front on Rodeo Drive!!!  And don't you forget it missy...love the pic and enjoyed your food for thought.


Susan Caldwell
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10 posted 2005-05-10 09:19 AM


Don't allow yourself to ever be hidden!!!

The world would be missing something wonderful if you did!!!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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11 posted 2005-05-10 05:54 PM


A Cohiba be the finest cigar on the face of the earth save a Montecristo -- which is topped only by the Cohiba...

And the checkered band on that hat you had on in your old pic looked just like a Cohiba band.  
http://www.dongabriel.net/catalogo/destaques.php?cat=1&PHPSESSID=f224c979c8e3 b97ade0f72c5bba11a88

So... what I was sayin in so many words was if you're going into a box it wouldn't be in the closet -- but right here in the one on top of my desk where I keep my precious gems!  

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2005-05-11 05:58 PM


oh sheesh, you guys sure know how to make a gal blush...You've all gone and, yes.. made my day!

Bella, I'd love that, thank you.

Thanks Bernie, glad you enjoyed.

Sunshinygirl? with da angels? sweet, thank you.

Rodeo Drive! Thank you Lady. I'll definitely  be found though heh.

Susan, you are too sweet. Thank you.

LR....smiling wide i'yam, Have a cigar on me   Thank you!

"we all have wings, but some of us don't know why"

Michael Hutchence (INXS)

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