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Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2005-05-06 01:33 AM


Your words are like shrapnel in my skull,
there are times before this that I thought
about what I've done
to complicate the simplistic crown upon your head.

I've struck you, with all my strength,
I've hit you, and what's more
is that a million painful and insulting
stings were resting in my hand, and
I hope and pray that you sob like a child,
I simply want you to understand my misery.


.
.
.

You are bleeding, and I feel
such bitter satisfaction, don't you think
you deserved it? Like you've said,
there are so much worse things in the world
in my head, equal signs
don't exist.

I am so sorry, I should've been
more compassionate, sympathetic, but
you are so selfish that I
cannot help it. I have to haunt you, I hope
that you notice...

.
.
.

..I have shattered in my skin, for
my guilt is what kills me
and my heart is dark with stains of sinful
acts...All I know is that I've died
with hot blood running in my veins..
    You remain,

silent and bruised, my last words.

© Copyright 2005 Meghan Armitage - All Rights Reserved
littlewing
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1 posted 2005-05-06 01:36 AM


I have felt this before Meg, a very long time ago when I was a child and when I read your words it brought me right back to that exact place, which is good because that is what good writing is meant to do.

You completely blew me away with this, I think it is the best thing I have ever read from you.

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2 posted 2005-05-06 03:52 AM


No need for iron daggers, wolf's bane, silver bullets, holy water, mirrors reflecting the rise of the sun.

Nope.

As romantic as all of that may read, all it really takes is this:

"I have shattered in my skin, for
my guilt is what kills me"



A powerful write and I have the distinct feeling there is more to come.

sigh.

Wish I'd written this lovie. Lawd knows I feel it.

passing shadows
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3 posted 2005-05-06 07:13 AM


yaknow Meg...I need this, just to make sense of what I feel these days

thank you

LeeJ
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4 posted 2005-05-06 11:32 AM


I have shattered in my skin, for
my guilt is what kills me
and my heart is dark with stains of sinful
acts...All I know is that I've died
with hot blood running in my veins..
    You remain,


I believe Meg, hurting others brings us to our knees...and to, those who love us, also understand us, for who we are, no fantasy, just real core emotions, which sometime run amuck...we are all subject to error and defeat...hugs dear one, for such splendid literature...you really Rock!


Kaoru
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5 posted 2005-05-06 12:40 PM


Thank you.
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6 posted 2005-05-06 01:49 PM


Did this strike a chord with me Meg, and a sour note it was!  Hang in there, it does get better.


Ericc
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7 posted 2005-05-06 02:50 PM


Powerful.

Eric

Aenimal
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8 posted 2005-05-06 09:43 PM


hug.
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9 posted 2005-05-06 09:58 PM


"I simply want you to understand my misery."

sigh, such a basic plea


Enchantress
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10 posted 2005-05-06 10:03 PM


Such a powerful and painful write Meghan.
Heart hugs~Nancy

Life is one great big canvas;
throw all the paint on it you can.
                    -Danny Kaye

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11 posted 2005-05-06 11:45 PM


powerful, yet vulnerable.
the last part just had to have been my favorite part.
this was just so amazingly written.

JamesMichael
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12 posted 2005-05-07 12:15 PM


Nice writing...James
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