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Unwilling Shopper
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Unwilling Shopper A tyranny of Too bright flowers as boxes Of asphalt french-fries. Come, strip mall haiku, Big box discount center Zen, Mad crowd senryu! Quiet pools glisten: Grease in the parking places. Cars that drip shop here. I shop here; I drip My own oil of discontent; I must stink like them. Converge on the mall; Scale the dead escalator, Ants on a corndog. Happiness depends On this place, so the ads say; Misery sounds sweet. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
is this the place where you get one of those yellow smileyface stickers slapped on your kid's hand when you come through the door and have a cart pushed in front of you so you can buy more without straining your arms waiting at the check-out for 20 minutes? hehehe...I do hate shopping |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I shop here; I drip My own oil of discontent; I must stink like them. Oh, no, my friend. *S* Never!!! *S* You simply tell it how it is... for all of us who lack that shopping gene... and for the discerning among those with it. *G* And that closing senyru.... LOL That could be me... is me... on any excursion with my sister! LOL I love this!!!! *S* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Oh man...this is me! I hate to shop...something about it makes me feel phobic...and I was just at that stripmall...never could figure out why they call them that....they strip you of your money maybe? Anyway, this was great fun to read and also well done, of course.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL "ants on a corndog" Thanks for the giggle! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
These are fantastic Ed.....Well Done! Mxx "we all have wings, but some of us don't know why" |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
serious bite - wonderfully done  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Ed you wrote the truth that all of us go through...i can associate with this totaly..nice write.. Goldenrose. Justice cannot be for oneside alone, but must be for both. (Eleanor Roosevelt) |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Looks like we're looking at the view from the same train this morning  Well done, my poet friend, well done...good to read you again!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
See why I send others?  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
So much truth, Ed. I remember not going into a store (or leaving my home) for a year...unless forced by others. ... saved money that way  M |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I hate shopping, and you got this poem perfect |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
A satirical look at the contemporary lifestyle, eh? You captured the unwilling shopper well, sounds like most of the men that I know and a few women.. myself? I enjoy window shopping but keep the wallet closed. Enjoyed the consistent, sharp tone. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
fabulous write Ed and shopping.. *shudders at the idea* |
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