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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2005-04-25 01:04 AM


i left your apartment
and you left me in love
let's call it quits
because i'm tired
and i'm cold
and you just don't have the energy
not for me
not for this
so you left me
in love.

i let you stand there
and tell me how it is.
tell me how it is
please
because someone like me
someone like me
wouldn't know
just say it.

i left the car
and you left me in love.
let's call it payback.
these hands
these hands that used to hold you tight
and tell you the world wouldn't leave you
i wouldn't leave you
..
i'm leaving..
a ring around your neck.

you left my side
and i,
i
left you in love.

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Soulfisher
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since 2005-01-07
Posts 226
where ever the fly fishing is good
1 posted 2005-04-25 02:31 AM


This is a well written poem that many people can and will identify with. I liked it very much. But just out of curiosity do you believe that by living a ring around his neck he'll return the favour with a ring around your finger?
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2005-04-25 04:13 AM


Enjoyed...James
Goldenrose
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since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

3 posted 2005-04-25 05:00 AM


Very good write...you conveyed intense emotion well...

Goldenrose.

Justice cannot be for oneside alone, but must be for both. (Eleanor Roosevelt)

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
4 posted 2005-04-25 07:57 AM


wow!
LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

5 posted 2005-04-25 08:37 AM


incredible
inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
6 posted 2005-04-26 12:01 PM


that love place.....does it again
majnu
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SF Bay Area
7 posted 2005-04-26 12:15 PM


well done.

-majnu
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