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nakdthoughts
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0 posted 2005-04-16 08:32 AM



Bandaiding the Mind

Behind the door I test my thoughts
And rest my tired, worrying all.
Beneath the covers of smiling nights
A pressure threatens, as shadows call

To down the ups, and narrow the wide
Tearing the building of what's inside.

Clouds disperse, though slowly float
Masking minds abandoning screams.
Sad erupts from passion's life
Purging fears of losing dreams.

And so it goes the downhill slide
Behind these eyes that cry inside.

Approval Me, a need believed
Though truth be known, ignorings best
From thoughts of others, pinning tales
And He the one who loses quest.

I AM, I CAN, I WILL succeed
Then He will be the ONE to bleed...


M (a little venting)

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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SEA
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1 posted 2005-04-16 09:13 AM


"I AM, I CAN, I WILL succeed
Then He will be the ONE to bleed..."


I loved this part...I couldn't agree more with it...some people may not understand it, but then they probably haven't been hurt this deep

passing shadows
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2 posted 2005-04-16 09:17 AM


nice vent
nakdthoughts
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3 posted 2005-04-16 09:50 AM


Thank you Sea...yes..sometimes there are those who want to keep you down...


Dixie Girl..good morning. Hope all is well

M

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4 posted 2005-04-16 10:47 AM


Tremendous vent, M.  
nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2005-04-16 11:03 AM


Thank you Helen...Every time I get a prospect of a way to earn a bit of money to make MY life better, my eventual "x" tells me all the bad points of going for it...until he breaks me down and I begin to doubt myself.

It is a cycle I am ready to rid myself of.
And about time, too.
M (I think he is seeing the "beginning of the end")

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6 posted 2005-04-16 11:42 AM


Behind you all the way here
You go woman!!
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

adagio
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7 posted 2005-04-16 12:05 PM


Vent if you must. It wokks for me.


       adagio


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8 posted 2005-04-16 06:59 PM


I AM, I CAN, I WILL succeed
Then He will be the ONE to bleed...

YEA...give him a kick from me too
hats off to you

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9 posted 2005-04-16 07:06 PM


You are writing wonderful stuff

Dave

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10 posted 2005-04-16 07:17 PM


Well, you vented well here. I sure hope it helped.
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11 posted 2005-04-16 07:18 PM


Great ending Maureen! you go girl.

mxx

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

nakdthoughts
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12 posted 2005-04-17 12:19 PM


Thank you all...yes it helped for the moment~~until the next time~~

hugs
M

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13 posted 2005-04-18 12:06 PM


"I AM, I CAN, I WILL succeed
Then He will be the ONE to bleed..."

**smiling** Oh, I know this well and yes he is the one bleeding now. Revenge is sweet!

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14 posted 2005-04-18 12:42 PM


My gawd, you "vent" well! This was superbly crafted and I was with you all the way, girl! I've been there and you captured those feelings and wrote of them with panache!

Your naked mind is something to behold!


EA

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