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Foxyoasis
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0 posted 2005-04-15 02:24 AM



Shed a tear cause I'm missing you
don't know how to see,one day I'
with you the next its just me.

It gets so pale I don't know what to
do I don't know how to deal with to
just stop caring for you.

Take it slow they say I shall and did
you said you never run out on me

But here I am alone in the shadows of
my own misery and your deception is the
only thing that keeps me warm at night.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


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Member Patricius
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just out of reach
1 posted 2005-04-15 09:39 AM


This is a very heartfelt piece. I think if you would have changed the structure abit...it would have been even better. The last stanza was awesome. hugs, Chris

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2 posted 2005-04-15 03:28 PM



Foxyoasis
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3 posted 2005-04-15 03:31 PM


ty guys

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....


passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2005-04-15 04:10 PM


I had one of those cold nights last night
I understand this

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5 posted 2005-04-16 09:17 PM


I know just how you feel.
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