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exhale
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since 2003-06-13
Posts 646
Alberta,Canada

0 posted 2005-04-14 12:41 PM


could you hear my voice
as if i were the one telling you to leave
when i was the one asking you to stay
i'll show you my words
through the seasons
so you could see my winter
my spring
my summer
and my autumn
you could see me
and the love
that exists in my veins
and maybe you could survive.

let's talk
i could help you dream
because i live it
and i breathe it
let's dance
and maybe we could love
but only if your willing
and i'm able
because my heart is on disabilities
and my voice is a long time gone.

© Copyright 2005 Chelsea - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
1 posted 2005-04-14 01:24 PM


I like this

kind of an ache to it, I feel

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

2 posted 2005-04-14 03:12 PM


You have quality it is very raw but the imagination the power makes you someone who will influence

Dave

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2005-04-15 05:24 AM


Like this...James
LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-04-15 08:08 AM


whoa...this was devine action speaking louder then words...very much enjoyed...does he know how lucky he is?  


WindWalker
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since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218

5 posted 2005-04-15 06:57 PM


Yes this is devine action speaking louder then words, I like the word crafting!
ThUnDeRkYsS
Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727
Wisconsin
6 posted 2005-04-15 10:52 PM


Enjoyed this one a lot, well done.

Brian

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



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