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exhale
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0 posted 2005-04-14 12:28 PM


she could hear the rain outside
as she asks if she's really here
this is life
this is life

who was she trying to convince?
she could feel herself breathe
as autumn seeped through her window
and into her lungs
she felt like new york
she glowed.

she feels like kissing a stranger
to feel new again
because her clothes,
her clothes
are sewn onto her skin
because she's lived in them for so long
welcome to your life.

if,
if she decided to stand beneath a streetlight
so you could see her
flaws and all
would you be the one
to cut her clothes off
and carry her to summer
once more.


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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
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1 posted 2005-04-14 10:15 AM


if,
if she decided to stand beneath a streetlight
so you could see her
flaws and all
would you be the one
to cut her clothes off
and carry her to summer
once more.

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could he/she? would he/she have enough heart
to do such for someone in need?
good thoughts evoked for me

Nightshade
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just out of reach
2 posted 2005-04-14 10:18 AM


awesome! much enjoyed. Chris

"The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze."
Gustavo Adolfo Becquer

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2005-04-14 01:48 PM


enjoyed the feeling this one brought
TexUS
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4 posted 2005-04-16 12:27 PM


Wow, powerful write!

Enjoyed this, thanks.

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
5 posted 2005-04-16 03:30 AM


Powerful..I love it.
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