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soul drifter
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0 posted 2005-04-13 01:50 PM



Upon Foggy Frisco

Upon foggy Frisco
watching the jazzy rainfall
Golden Gate framing you
in the gallery of my heart
1999 faded softly into 2000
as night gave way to day
the arc of the bay felt chilly
as I beared witness to your downfall
Coit Tower pressed its shadow upon us
mist and rain surrounding tears
taking them away on my finger
and planting them in the ground
the wharf was empty and barren
so were you
but I loved you anyway
but I didn't know what that meant
till you destroyed yourself
and now the world is so still I can't breathe
my poetry flies on the breeze
taken to Alcatraz
or maybe down south
with the noisy seagulls
obscuring the sounds of the ships
in the harbor
and my thoughts of you
written like a memo
spiked upon foggy Frisco
and straight through me
like a nightmare
like a hundred nightmares
I guess I miss you
do you miss me?

Once upon foggy Frisco
I watched the bluesy rainfall...

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

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Martie
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1 posted 2005-04-13 02:05 PM


soul drifter

The imagery in this took me back to a time when I lived in Frisco.  I recall feeling some of these same feelings about love and loss too...it is a good city for that.  You've made me homesick!  

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2005-04-13 02:06 PM


loved this...

I lived there for two years...

little to cold for me...but I am glad I got to be there..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Cloud 9
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3 posted 2005-04-13 02:41 PM


I love living near there. Just a car ride away to see the beauty in what you just wrote.


passing shadows
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4 posted 2005-04-13 03:01 PM


very touching write
a bit of ache

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with you
5 posted 2005-04-13 11:46 PM


"and my thoughts of you
written like a memo
spiked upon foggy Frisco
and straight through me
like a nightmare
like a hundred nightmares
I guess I miss you
do you miss me?


Once upon foggy Frisco
I watched the bluesy rainfall..."


this sure hits home for me....
well done.

soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08
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6 posted 2005-04-14 10:10 AM


Thanks. This is one of the few things I've written about a city that I've actually been to, unlike Chicago and New York. I only spent a couple days in San Francisco, just breezing through 6 years ago, but it was just enough for me to fall in love with it. Still, Colorado is and always will be my home. I do miss ol' Frisco though. That's partly why I wrote this. Thanks again...

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

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