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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2005-04-09 02:53 PM




Every movement
brings out the sense of you,
leaving behind the pull of want.
Yet within lies a strangeness,
a cold that expectations caress,
edging the view in a haziness,
my hands grasping but finding
a sometime emptiness.

Tell me I am beautiful,
and I will believe,
if the kiss composes a song of love,
a rhythm of sway to fit the mood,
and the touch builds that fire of warmth
to ease the chill.

The many voices talk to me,
some louder than others, ignoring most
to search out acceptance.
Dress me down in "the mirror of time",
know me, the real me
and my heart will become yours.


"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (04-11-2005 09:46 AM).]

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passing shadows
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displaced
1 posted 2005-04-09 04:38 PM


and he will be a lucky man

good write M
love the new picture too

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
2 posted 2005-04-11 09:47 AM


tried to get a decent smile which is hard to do when staring at yourself
thanks Dix

hugs
M

DavePage
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3 posted 2005-04-11 01:10 PM


Stripping all the fabric of defence built up over the years leaves unknowning because the self is there but protected by everything it takes to protect it

Pared back to the soul leaves you vunerable unprotected and having to build up that protection again

Your word are excellent and I think, couragous

Dave

passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2005-04-11 01:56 PM


very pretty smile
bbent
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5 posted 2005-04-12 05:07 AM


was gonna icq you how much i liked this one but no go so ...Hi!!! What a torcher.Burns with passionate emotion.`Could sure feel you.Good wright...  

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

Local Rebel
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Southern Abstentia
6 posted 2005-04-12 11:01 PM


you ARE

beautiful

believe it

and it's such an infectious smile

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
7 posted 2005-04-12 11:39 PM


I will tell you that you are beautiful! ~ and your photo is the proof of such!

Any man who wins your heart, is indeed fortunate!

Love & Light,
Linda
P.S. Take a good look at yourself in this mirror and see what others see!
Mirror


JamesMichael
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8 posted 2005-04-13 05:18 AM


Becoming is a good place to be...James
Goldenrose
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9 posted 2005-04-13 06:09 AM


Enjoyed reading this very much M...and i too like your new smiley picture..

Goldenrose.

Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.)

adagio
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Marrero, La.
10 posted 2005-04-13 02:12 PM


Honest and from the heard enjoyed
       adagio


Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27
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11 posted 2005-04-13 02:16 PM


"a cold that expectations caress"

wonderful song of hope and longing...love that line I quoted...so much said in so few words.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Cloud 9
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12 posted 2005-04-13 02:35 PM


Beautiful
Sadelite
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13 posted 2005-04-13 05:57 PM


nakdthought,

   I've read this several times, wondering what to say.  Still can't think of anything, but thought I'd let you know it has touched me.

You write so passionately!

                sadie

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