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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2005-04-09 08:09 AM


why can't miracles be mine?


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five dusk petals round the eye
we kiss the edge and linger, cling
dripping dew of all the hues
of lifetimes of remembering
curling ends of dark that do
everything but cry and you
float so gently to the ground...

velvet
and no need of thorn
as if the gentleness of you
allowed a stitch of my pretense
I would mend this
breathe your breath
not a notion of duress
thread of cleft the blossoming
of less and it
is aching seed
in
my heart for all of us
to keep us all together now--

As another
kites the breeze
petaling
the sorrowing
of this dying of a rose
leaving us a trinity
wondering
if we can bring
to the other
circling
bleed the wind of whistling
inbetween the spaces sing
stories of the past
when we
were cleft together bud--

we were

a promise of the fledge of life--

why can't miracles be mine?

They were.

the gathering of us


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Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2005-04-09 08:41 AM


serenity,
A delightful read this morning, may I offer
you a "Randy Dragon"

serenity blaze
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2 posted 2005-04-09 08:43 AM


best offer I had all...

hell, that's the best offer I've had.


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3 posted 2005-04-09 12:56 PM


Something so enchanting and captivating
about a rose, huh Ser?

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4 posted 2005-04-09 01:33 PM


Beautiful!
adagio
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5 posted 2005-04-09 03:58 PM


sounds like you might be feeling a little better, and up early too!


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6 posted 2005-04-09 04:04 PM


"why can't miracles be mine?

They were.

the gathering of us"

this brought tears to my eyes...

passing shadows
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7 posted 2005-04-09 04:48 PM


very touching write
love the ending

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8 posted 2005-04-09 04:53 PM


"we were

a promise of the fledge of life--

why can't miracles be mine?

They were.

the gathering of us"


*Hugging you close Ser*

ice
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9 posted 2005-04-09 05:48 PM


hmmmm zone 7, way to tender for where I live, but still a beautiful plant for the south...
Not as beautiful as this poem, of course...
enjoyed
____________ice/ford
   ><>

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10 posted 2005-04-09 05:56 PM



A beautiful tribute, serenity...
she's smiling on you all...


JamesMichael
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11 posted 2005-04-09 06:22 PM


Fine writing...James
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12 posted 2005-04-09 08:26 PM


Oh, so lovely Karen. hugs, Chris

"The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze."
Gustavo Adolfo Becquer

Martie
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13 posted 2005-04-09 09:12 PM


Karen

such beauty as a flower, fills your thoughts and lessons despair and remembers so many things....and that is a miracle!    

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14 posted 2005-04-09 09:15 PM


I truly hope that you all felt the difference in this one, as it was written more as an affirmation of life, and not about loss. Y'see, as I was reading about roses, I read that the petals of rose pattern in fives...and well, I have four siblings, and when I came across this southern variety described as

"A dependable, tough pioneer"

I thought of my brothers and sisters.



So thanks for reading, and holding my hand yet again, and as each day passes, I understand that I can indeed do this.

And I am so lucky.

I have two very incredible families.

The one I was born into, and the one that lets me hang around--Pip.

iliana
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15 posted 2005-04-09 09:38 PM


"As another
kites the breeze
petaling
the sorrowing
of this dying of a rose
leaving us a trinity
wondering
if we can bring
to the other
circling
bleed the wind of whistling
inbetween the spaces sing
stories of the past
when we
were cleft together bud--"

One to be treasured for as long as poets read and write, this is.  I love your comparison, K.   ....jo  


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