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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2005-04-05 06:17 PM




crows ruffle a cry
gulls ride the stream

and the breeze
sweeps  
away the dream

my eyes

little sickle shaped
slits
rise like a dark weed

raveled

by the slap of dawn

they open to the sea
to find the moon

and you

blue and planetary



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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-04-05 06:57 PM


You write like an angel...
Dark Angel
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2 posted 2005-04-05 07:05 PM


and you gave me my wings

lymls

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

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3 posted 2005-04-05 07:10 PM


It is always a pleasure to read your unique imagery and wording!  You have such a gift of creativity!

              sadie

Martie
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4 posted 2005-04-05 08:32 PM


Yes, Maree...just what Sadie said...and also

"little sickle shaped
slits
rise like a dark weed"

The first part of that sort of threw me off...but the ending is just like you!

Now my eyes, deal with dawn with little sickle shaped slits...I know because I've seen them.  


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5 posted 2005-04-05 08:49 PM


A wonderful write Maree!!
Into my library with this treasure.
Hugs~Nancy

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2005-04-05 09:41 PM


oh man.....
I WISH I HAD WROTE THIS!!!!

how do you do this?
so much imagery and so few words....
I loved the surreal, ethereal, essence..

awesome write poetess Maree.

It's only words and words are all I have to take your heart away.


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7 posted 2005-04-06 11:05 AM


  
Sunshine
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8 posted 2005-04-06 11:08 AM



Look how you glow
in your grow, Maree...

Simply amazing...




LeeJ
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9 posted 2005-04-06 12:51 PM


sheeshhh, agree with all the above, not much else I could say to complement this any better....except...one word...signficant


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10 posted 2005-04-06 01:30 PM


bella this could be my favourite, flawless this
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11 posted 2005-04-25 01:50 PM


again enchanted
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12 posted 2005-04-27 09:39 AM


Tis good, this slap of dawn....takes some of us a while to see the light, but it's still good when we finally do.....

Gosh I do like that image!

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Susan Caldwell
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13 posted 2005-04-27 09:47 AM


I missed this one...

very glad it was brought up again.

Ditto what Karen said...

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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