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nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2005-04-02 06:01 AM



I have traded my life
for one drowning in tears
of indifference, a hardness growing,
a wall too difficult to climb
sometimes.

I can't escape myself and the years
of learnings and contentment that no longer
seems to fit in today's world,
where needs overcome and
acceptance is always one sided.

My reflection divides me in two.
I see happiness free flowing, pleasing to my eyes
when understanding meets and the tapestry laid before
is a blending of desires, a sharing of the mix of life.

The other side leaves me unraveled, sometimes threadbare
trying so hard to fill those dreams of another,
wanting the loneliness to subside
and the mixed emotions to settle into a pattern
that is warm and loving and healing.

Maybe I am too old for this.
Maybe the inside of me is lying to this body
and what feels right is a fantasy and
is an illusion plaguing my mind.

I am a prisoner of a lost love, just a dreamer
wondering when I will be released from it all.


M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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ice
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since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2005-04-02 07:52 AM


Well expressed and perfectly ended...but

"too old for this"

I don't think so

Your words display strong passion, someone will notice and ask you to share that someday.
You apparently have plenty to give.

A good read, even with its sad overtone...

__________ice
  ><>

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
2 posted 2005-04-02 07:57 AM


but sometimes the truth hurts when realized and I do believe I am too old for "this"

thank you for your kind response

M

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
3 posted 2005-04-02 09:57 PM


I dont think you can ever be too old
nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2005-04-03 03:10 AM


thanks Dixie...hope you had a good day. Mine turned out better than expected.

hugs
M

Local Rebel
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since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia
5 posted 2005-04-03 02:39 PM


It's nice to see that beautiful smile M!  

sometimes it feels like we're too old -- old flames are hard to put out -- reflection and writing are great ways

the forthrightness of this peice puts it out there in a voice that everyone can understand and many hear in their own heads -- I think it's true value lies there.

[This message has been edited by Local Rebel (04-03-2005 11:00 PM).]

bbent
Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521
Alaska
6 posted 2005-04-03 10:44 PM


been a while,enjoyed,good to know theres commonalities amongst us all.you've such a gift of saying it so understandably.

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
7 posted 2005-04-03 10:54 PM


sometimes u just need a break to recharge
and believe in it again
hugs,
m

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
8 posted 2005-04-03 11:32 PM


I can't escape myself and the years
of learnings and contentment that no longer
seems to fit in today's world,

I think for the likes of you and I,
the old ball and chain is a fact of life.
We tow it along, because we gave it our all
and expect no less.

Maureen~     

Goldenrose
Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665

9 posted 2005-04-04 05:37 AM


This was a little sad but hopeful in other areas too..enjoyed this M...keep smiling...thank you..

Goldenrose.

Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.)

WindWalker
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since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218

10 posted 2005-04-04 11:17 AM


I agree; "this is well expressed and perfectly ended:" I love the word crafting in this and the imagery is very good too!
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