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Jessie Carstein
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since 2004-01-08
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0 posted 2005-03-31 09:57 AM


He stands on the street corner,
The filtered cancer in his teeth,
Watching the buzz of speeding traffic,
Holding a bagged greenhouse tightly.

His eyes dance across the shifting scene,
A noisy concerto rings in his ears,
Flashing lights illuminate and hide him,
The art of survival on the street.

A whistling man walks into an alleyway,
Turns and flicks his head askew,
The innocent follows in his footsteps
Into darkness and silence of the void.

An explosion rings inside his head,
A silver comet skewers his chest,
Fire flares through the red tunnels,
Eyes blackened by the raging inferno.

He is a fallen child of the street,
Lost in the purgatory of the slums,
The lush green package slips from his hand
And he flails from the edge of life itself.

Will anyone scratch his name on a grave?
Mourn the fallen child of the scrapheap?
While we enjoy our stinking riches
A child’s life is smothered by the concrete.


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Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
1 posted 2005-03-31 10:17 AM


"The filtered cancer in his teeth"
~ creative way of referring to a cigarette.

You gave a very vivid description of "survival on the street". It is tragic the number of young souls that are lost out there in the concrete jungle.

Powerfully moving.

EA

Jessie Carstein
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2 posted 2005-03-31 10:20 AM


This was inspired by a recent journey to 'Rio De Janeiro' where I saw many street kids either being severely beaten or being encouraged to kill each other in a ritual claled 'funk balls'.  Disgusting that in such an age we have this kind of scenario in our midst.
Dautz Write
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3 posted 2005-03-31 10:20 AM


Found much power behind your pen.

" He is a fallen child of the street,
Lost in the purgatory of the slums,
The lush green package slips from his hand
And he flails from the edge of life itself.

Will anyone scratch his name on a grave?
Mourn the fallen child of the scrapheap?
While we enjoy our stinking riches
A child’s life is smothered by the concrete"

Midnitesun
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Gaia
4 posted 2005-03-31 10:35 AM


Vivid imagery here, wish it were just some Hollywood fantasy. You have cried a Why? for many urchins with this write
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