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Snowflakes #82 |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
# 82 You are like the walls in a maze without solution. Every turn, every hall, every convoluted path leads to You. I cannot even go back. The way is too narrow for me to turn around. I can only plunge ahead, cursing every vain attempt to evade You. Your patience and tenacity astound me; why I do not know - if indeed You are my Maker. -majnu -------------------------------------- Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
My lines sparse and dangly, yours long and smooth -- I should try that. I'll write any way that seems to work for the particular poem, and this way does. That clinking noise you just heard was this tool landing in my bag of tricks...... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Sounds like the short version of Pilgrim's Progress. Enjoyed tremendously. I, also, need to stretch my lines as Ratleader mentioned above. My terse verse needs help. Thanks for sharing this. Shenachie |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BRAVO! So happy to read you again. And I was delighted by your reply to my Red Lake Senryu. And this write is another reason why I have greatly missed reading you! |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
Er; TY for the comps. BTW am I paying S&H for the washer and dryer or is the prize agency  brigdet; i am not familiar with Pilgrim's Progress. the largest influence on my work is Tagore. he offers his work up in simple honesty, and I am trying to do the same. we must not fear to be bare before the eye that sees all. midnite; it is great to read and hear from you. much love and hail to the left! -majnu |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Your patience and tenacity astound me; why I do not know - if indeed You are my Maker. Astounding!!! |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
i like the thought process that goes with reading this. snow "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
very creative format, and ingenius verse New lovers are nervous and tender, but smash everything. For the heart is an organ of fire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
majnu Enjoyed the thoughts. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very much enjoyed your art. Good to see you here again.  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
majnu I looked for this after reading Ed's poem that you inspired....now I can see why! Good write! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
"You are like the walls in a maze without solution. Every turn, every hall, every convoluted path leads to You." Two stunning lines, only to be surpassed by the message! miscellanea |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
majnu, this one is a thinker. I've read it through twice and have to read it again. Excellent poem. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
thank you all so much for your compliments. martie, which poem of ed's? could you please link it to me. -majnu |
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