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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-03-27 10:19 AM



Love me
For strong wings

The heights
I am soaring,
Canyons exploring,

Crying winds
Trying,
But for my flying:

Weathered,
Untethered,

Freely
Returning
To your open hand,

Love me. . .
Best


© Copyright 2005 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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1 posted 2005-03-27 02:29 PM


I love Eagle words

Dave

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2 posted 2005-03-27 03:26 PM


Many days in Alaska were spent watching these majestic creatures swoop and fly, soar upon outstretched wings that rule the skies.  
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3 posted 2005-03-28 11:37 AM


Your words always touch me... I love the way this ends. *S*
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4 posted 2005-03-28 03:29 PM


This flows marvellously, and is wonderfully complete in its scope---the emphasis on freedom and exploration, the carelessness of the meter you chose, the feminine rhymes---I am a big fan of poetry that synthesizes form and meaning, and you've done that here very nicely.

Have you ever read the short poem "The Eagle" by Tennyson?  I had to think of it while I was reading yours, because you throw your eagle directly into the action, while he only describes up to the point of the Eagle's taking off into flight.  You might enjoy it---

Anyways, I enjoyed reading this.

Brian

"God becomes as we are that we may be as he is."  ~William Blake

vega
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5 posted 2005-03-28 04:03 PM


A beautiful piece , "To soar on eagles wings".  The imagery you create here is beautiful. Excellent write and thanks for sharing.   ..V
Sunshine
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6 posted 2005-03-28 04:11 PM


Freely
Returning
To your open hand,

~*~

Mentally, my mind
changed "hand" to "land"...

A good strong poem, John.

Drauntz
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7 posted 2007-05-01 12:33 PM


the most beautiful poem of yours.

nature and full of spirit.

I love this poem.

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