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EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

0 posted 2005-03-25 10:48 PM

All the Fools Sailed Away

As we drift through life I’m never surprised,
By the things we’ll do for love and a song,
It seems that from half-truths life is comprised,
And there’s surely no sense of right and wrong.

Yet what does it matter if it’s not me?
Disregard the, “us,” the, “they,” and the, “them.”
Cast our misgivings into the Dead Sea,
Fear not redemption for none will condemn.

We are the innocents; we are the damned,
We write not in starlight for our words hurt,
Against naked truth our hearts have been slammed,
Beneath the blackened moon…we’re the inert.

Yea all the fools sailed away o'er the seas,
And the hunger that’s left naught will appease.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2005-03-25 11:02 PM

As we drift through life I’m never surprised,
By the things we’ll do for love and a song,

And we often even skip the song. *S*

I like this very much... it flows so smoothly! *S*

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

2 posted 2005-03-25 11:23 PM

Sweetie,
This is truly a wonderful piece
you have composed.
I enjoyed reading this,yes I've added it to all the others I have. ;-)

Thank-you too for the comment.

Hugs

Amour Vous,

;-)

Within this heart you'll find love

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

3 posted 2005-03-25 11:50 PM

I find this painful - but then perhaps it is merely my mood today - you write the ache well, Kevin -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

4 posted 2005-03-26 02:58 AM

EV2 ~

You chose well, your icon.

You write ~ I read
~ at least twice over!

EA

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2005-03-26 08:32 AM

good to read you again, even though this aches to me

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2005-03-26 08:36 AM

EV2,
True thoughts, good write. Enjoyed

Ratleader

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since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

7 posted 2005-03-26 09:25 AM

These verses carry it all --

We are the innocents; we are the damned,
We write not in starlight for our words hurt,
Against naked truth our hearts have been slammed,
Beneath the blackened moon…we’re the inert.

Yea all the fools sailed away o'er the seas,
And the hunger that’s left naught will appease.

They are so strong that they could BE the poem, so clear, so original.... A six-line sonnet wouldn't do -- or maybe it would....I did write one with only four lines, once upon a time....
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Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2005-03-26 09:29 AM

Wonderful wonderful write Kevin...
I so much enjoy your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2005-03-26 10:36 AM

good read

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

10 posted 2005-03-26 01:48 PM

Well done.

believe in what your heart feels...

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2005-03-26 05:06 PM

true, even though everything stays afloat in the Dead Sea

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

12 posted 2005-03-26 09:03 PM

EV2,
  It says it all.

   "We are the innocents; we are the damned,
   We write not in starlight for our words hurt,
   Against naked truth our hearts have been slammed,
   Beneath the blackened moon…we’re the inert.

   Yea all the fools sailed away o'er the seas,
   And the hunger that’s left naught will appease."

  You just keep getting better and better!  Love your writing!

           miscellanea

Kevo
Member

since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

13 posted 2005-03-27 12:08 PM

Same thing my friend, looking for a brilliant and here it is. You writing is sheer brilliance. Talent drips from your pen like a great fountain. I am always left with my jaw on the floor whenever I discover one your jewels upon these blue pages. It is simply a thrill to be allowed to read your thought-provoking, brilliantly painted writes. Why haven't you published this stuff?

Kevin

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

14 posted 2005-03-27 09:39 AM

It is Easter,
A time to rise up from the detrice of what was...without fret or regard for probing eyes. It is the substance of the miracle that displays it's theme upon the heart.

A toast to the spring poet!
TD

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