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An Very Old I For the Challenge

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Huan Yi
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0 posted 03-19-2005 03:28 PM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Huan Yi


I
am I,
the governing I
that keeps at bay,
secures the peace.

Holding high as thereby
trumpets man,
denies the beast.

Shielding hearts
against the breaker
naught the giving
nor caring how;
the greedy,
seedy,
war whore maker
extant before
and behind the brow.

Crusade and aid
wherever good.
Steadfast beside the virtues fair;
for as it should
and as I would
did I
the gods' omnipotence bear.

Whom, in he
that honors me,
will sing a song to soothe his head,
in tones
of proud nobility
to sound beyond his final bed.

So there,
within
the thing as dies,
rich that
which seeks
all this at least:

I
am I,
the governing I
that trumpets man,. . .
denies the beast.

  
© Copyright 2005 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 03-19-2005 04:57 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I read this with anticipation since I have been wondering for some time who you are.

And you didn't disappoint, as you remain a mystery to me and yet, at the same time you manage an excellent portrait of "everyman."

I hope you understand this is a compliment--k?

Your poetry is excellent, and I do admire your style greatly, tho it's not one that wordy me would attempt to emulate.

But I would if I could.

Huan Yi
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2 posted 03-19-2005 10:19 PM       View Profile for Huan Yi   Email Huan Yi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Huan Yi

SB,

For a long time I have been a lone diver.
Going alone under water for as long as four hours,
(carrying twin 102s), in conditions often suggestive
of a tomb.  It is something I imagine like dying, if not dead.
And I have found how superfluous the thing we call I is.
Once beyond it, what emerged was, ( if there be one at all),
who I can perhaps describe as my bit of the eternal.  The best
illustration, (read decades after the thing
above was written), I can think of is :

I am not I.
I am this one
walking beside me whom I do not see,
whom at times I manage to visit,
and whom at other times I forget;
who remains calm and silent when I talk,
and forgives, gently, when I hate,
who walks where I am not,
who will remain standing when I die.

Juan Ramon Jimenez

Once back on shore, who would again,
(yet not wholly),  envelope is the I that
each of us has, grown out of experience
and the need to survive if not prosper in
the current everyday of existence.

Consequently, when not treated with proper disregard,
this notion of that common I having ultimate importance
strikes me, at best, as humorous.

Thanks for reading.

John

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3 posted 03-20-2005 10:06 AM       View Profile for Ratleader   Email Ratleader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Ratleader's Home Page   View IP for Ratleader

This is quality stuff, challenge or no...I'm glad you posted it!

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Martie
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4 posted 03-20-2005 11:51 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Thanks for posting this!
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5 posted 03-20-2005 02:24 PM       View Profile for Nightshade   Email Nightshade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nightshade's Home Page   View IP for Nightshade

Very interesting - as is all of your work.
Chris

You are ice and fire. The touch of you burns my hands like snow.
~Amy Lowell~

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6 posted 03-20-2005 05:10 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

And this is why, when I'm sometimes puzzled by your work, I no longer hesitate to ask.

Your replies are ever insightful John.

thank you for taking the time. (and that other guy next to you too)

(and you have my admiration on the diving thing--as "I am" quite claustophic, and while the beauty of the sport intrigues me, the lack of air horrifies me.)

Thanks again for indulging me with your patience.
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7 posted 05-01-2007 12:53 AM       View Profile for Drauntz   Email Drauntz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Drauntz

both the poem and comment interest me.
I take a step aside and look at "I". who?
by this I am sure will lose myself one day.
 
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