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bad advice for life |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I was taught to read the proof backward isolate the truth to know the blueprint beforehand as every part must stand alone and qualify itself atone a blend to ring a bellnote whole an ecstacy of symphony somehow "all" which begs for more as if there were a "most complete" as if perfection were my knees aching on the floor for your-- and this is bad advice for life. So order us a coupled drink with shots like notes along the side inched in margins lengthening the missives to myself I add some hieroglyphs, shorthand... talk to me and let the ice melt slow as words upon my tongue teasing till you hear the crunch of my editing, you know, I can't hear a word you say when you look at me that way I study all the glints of breaks [stet] within your eyes I take advice like cherries in my drink citing sensuality knowing you can't think like this watching as I break a mist of juice between the biting need of my teeth on manuscripts that you recite too casually chewing on the stem, I think: this is bad advice for life but how we love to bleed. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-19-2005 03:17 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...sometimes I give myself bad advice...James |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"as if perfection were my knees aching on the floor for your--" hmmm...can't sleep and right now the thought is intriguing. ...sorry. *smile* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*laughing* We bitch about hunger, but it keeps us alive and hunting, now don't it? thank you james, sweetheart  and icebox? heh...well, grin. Blush. um, yeah.   |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The worst thing is... some of these things I taught myself... and that only intensifies the consequences. *S* Wonderful work, dear lady... with replies that leave me smiling... and yeah... hungry. LOL |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
but how we love to bleed. Hmmm yes, sometimes? I cut myself (metaphorically speaking of course) so that I may drink and crave the hunger over and over again  another for me to keep and drink from m'lady mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn what a piece |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Excellent write my friend. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
as if there were a "most complete" as if perfection were my knees aching on the floor for your-- and this is bad advice for life. So order us a coupled drink with shots like notes along the side inched in margins lengthening the missives to myself I add some hieroglyphs, shorthand... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ *shaking me head* ..... shorthand? ... nope.... POETRY... pure and pefect poetry.... You can write all the fiction ya want...but rhyme is second skin for you KA...and ya wear it soooooo well. one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I was taught the same way K - as a matter of fact, and your sister will vouch for this, go ask her, I always start from the end and end up at the beginning. (sheesh, you already know that anyhow LOL) This made me see a true writer in the process . . . up there . . . *smile* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I love the way you write, Karen...you always make me bleed (if that means think and feel and nod my head)  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
DANG !!! Hugs to you witchyone, Chrislane You are ice and fire. The touch of you burns my hands like snow. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A funny thing happened on the way to the prose forum--some poetry leaked out! thank you all for taking the time to read and reply You are all damned fine company. |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
poetic perfection Karen....you say it like no other...! hugssss you.... ~~*~~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
damn... you do collapse me K... your creativity and imagery.. well hell, everything.... I love it all. |
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