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Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

0 posted 2005-03-15 09:55 AM

She now speaks
in whispers,
her voice a soft murmur
in hush of breeze...

                I hear her calling

faintly,       somewhere in the distance
and I catch a scent
that reminds me
of yesterday
when skies o're head
weren't so gray,

and I plead to see
all that has been
hidden from me
       and I pray
to hear
her voice more        clearly

but still it remains,
           distant, so distant....

Strain as I might
to tune into the sound
it seems my spirit
is somehow bound
         to bleed emotions
to my pen

until I can feel her
once again....

Fault?  I do not know...

has she forsaken me
or was it I
that forgot         to try

and I wonder
would I still know her
if we were to meet again.....

somewhere
in the distance.

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper...
NAH, still nothing...
my give a DAMN is busted....Jodee

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

1 posted 2005-03-15 10:06 AM

Gray days end....know that. The sun's always up there, just waiting for a chance to shine on you!

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Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

2 posted 2005-03-15 10:07 AM

*smiling*.....thank you Ed, for understanding this one....

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2005-03-15 10:09 AM

it is the distance which draws us...if we do choose, to a place of submission, dear sweet music...as your words provoke...the brilliance of you shall prevail....but a moment in time is all, but a moment in time

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2005-03-15 10:29 AM

gray skies?

they mean what we assign them, you know?

label gray better than black and work your way up.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

5 posted 2005-03-15 10:42 AM

The velvety grey foliage of 'Dusty Miller' or the fragrance of grey sage...soothing greys.

Distant sounds have a way of returning sometimes, embracing you within a circle.

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

6 posted 2005-03-15 11:00 AM

  I remember pleading for the same things once...My dad, how I miss him.  I love the sensitivity with which you write; also like the presentation with all the pauses in just the right spots! They give readers time to travel in remembrances of their own.  Touching...

       miscellanea

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2005-03-15 11:13 AM

Gentle
Interesting write, enjoyed the read.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2005-03-15 11:17 AM

love this

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

9 posted 2005-03-15 11:36 AM

wow - this really reached into my heart and tugged at the strings-

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

ice
Member Elite

since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

10 posted 2005-03-15 11:37 AM

"Strain as I might
to tune into the sound
it seems my spirit
is somehow bound
to bleed emotions
to my pen"

You have done this well here, GS....

The emotions of this poem speak loudly from your pen.

Enjoyed
__________ice/ford
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littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

11 posted 2005-03-15 03:40 PM

Oh Donna,

this hit way too close to home, especially today.

I search for her too . . .

Just know I understand and she will return, maybe just not in the exact same shape as she left.

Your writing is blowing my mind.
I am so proud of you.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

12 posted 2005-03-15 03:45 PM

Donna, Suzie is so right..
You are soaring with your writing..
I know this feeling...this grey day feeling.
Sending heart hugs your way.

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

13 posted 2005-03-16 10:08 AM

Thank you all, so very much..for your support..

Suzie?

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

14 posted 2005-03-16 03:24 PM

Wow! I think you may have wondered around in my head lately.

beautiful Donna and very touching.

a

Mxx

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

15 posted 2005-03-16 03:39 PM

Maree, I would love to wonder around in that beautiful mind of yours! Thanx sweetie.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

16 posted 2005-03-16 05:55 PM

I liked this, the flow was nice. But who is the "she" that you're talking about?

"I tried so hard....But in the end...It doesn't even matter.."~LP

"I shut my eyes and hold my cries to myself"~ Taproot

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

17 posted 2005-03-17 03:01 PM

read again Stac...she...
is the person that you lose when you get lost...... Hugs hon.

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