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choshi
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0 posted 2005-03-14 09:30 AM

So abrupt,
your reluctant departure
from this silent room-
yet shared kisses still linger
with scents of mint and honey.

miscellanea
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1 posted 2005-03-14 09:50 AM

Enjoyed the contrasts in this short piece.
miscellanea

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2005-03-14 10:02 AM

choshi
Allot said in a few words.

choshi
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3 posted 2005-03-14 10:03 AM

Thank you Sy....

~P

choshi
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4 posted 2005-03-14 10:04 AM

Thank you ~M, so glad you enjoyed....~P

Earth Angel
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5 posted 2005-03-14 11:44 AM

I do so love reading your poems that convey so much with an economical use of words!

EA

choshi
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6 posted 2005-03-14 12:02 PM

Thank you EA and :hug: back to you ~P

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2005-03-14 07:05 PM

Nice...James

choshi
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8 posted 2005-03-14 08:14 PM

Nice...James

Thank you James

~P

Nightshade

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just out of reach

9 posted 2005-03-14 09:31 PM

Ooooh, this is excellent!!
hugs, Chris

"Nunc scio quit sit amor."
~ Virgil

choshi
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10 posted 2005-03-14 10:05 PM

Awww, Thank you Chris,

back ~P

Zinsser
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11 posted 2005-03-14 10:21 PM

very well done...
~~ Connie ~~

choshi
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12 posted 2005-03-15 04:31 AM

Thank you Connie....~P

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13 posted 2005-03-15 09:36 AM

Alone is a heavy thing, but with a memory like this to sustain you, I have a feeling it'll be ok, no matter how long it lasts.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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choshi
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14 posted 2005-03-15 10:19 AM

Alone is a heavy thing, but with a memory like this to sustain you, I have a feeling it'll be ok, no matter how long it lasts.
~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
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Hi ~R, I appreciate your comment and sensitivity as a reader, as the separation spoken of was only brief and temporary, upon reflection, I do realize that the moment felt like an infinity. I guess that came through ....Thank you ~P

inkedgoddess
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15 posted 2005-03-16 08:40 AM

a cup of tea
with a twist of mint
your honey
will sweeten soon
as the cup
runneths over

Susan Caldwell
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16 posted 2005-03-16 09:04 AM

"your reluctant departure"

well done, because I want to know more.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

choshi
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17 posted 2005-03-16 09:13 AM

a cup of tea
with a twist of mint
your honey
will sweeten soon
as the cup
runneths over

Let's drink red wine,
fullbodied as our passion;
Why wait the morrow-
the night has not yet fallen,
this ceaseless wait consumes me.

~P

choshi
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18 posted 2005-03-16 09:17 AM

"your reluctant departure"

well done, because I want to know more.

So sensitive and perceptive Susan, To me this was the most important phrase......your wanting to know more does indeed pick up on the shared eagerness I was hoping to convey.

Thank you

Paul

Midnitesun

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19 posted 2005-03-16 09:42 AM

I enjoyed both flavor and scent, the emotions you captured in so few words. Well done, Paul.

choshi
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20 posted 2005-03-16 10:16 AM

Thank you Kacy, I'm glad you caught the flavor and the scent.....~P

suthern

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21 posted 2005-03-16 03:30 PM

A taste that lingers, fueling an appetite for more. *S* I like this very much!

passing shadows
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displaced

22 posted 2005-03-16 06:53 PM

abrupt seems to be the only way departures can be

good write, once again
it's a pleasure to have you here

choshi
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23 posted 2005-03-16 07:43 PM

"...abrupt seems to be the only way departures can be..."

Good point Dixie, and thank you for your warm thoughts ~P

choshi
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24 posted 2005-03-16 07:45 PM

A taste that lingers, fueling an appetite for more. *S* I like this very much!

Oh yes, Suthern, that is exactly how it felt, appetites fueled....Thank you ~P

iliana
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25 posted 2005-03-16 11:58 PM

Yummy poem, Paul!

....jo

choshi
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26 posted 2005-03-17 09:11 AM

Thank you ~Jo

back at ya'

J. K. Mitchell
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27 posted 2005-03-17 01:44 PM

You make me remember...

choshi
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28 posted 2005-03-17 01:50 PM

"You make me remember..."

Ahh...J.K., that can be so bittersweet, still I choose to remember.......~P

Sunshine

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29 posted 2005-03-21 09:06 AM

It's what lingers
that stain our senses
for all time...

choshi
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30 posted 2005-03-21 09:51 AM

Oh yes indeed, Karilea

..what stains our senses, I like that ...~P

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