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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2005-03-11 07:24 AM



splinters from
and exploding sun
clapping hands
with glass fingers
and mirrors behind
like memories
on video
in loop love replay

does the dawn tiptoe
with heavy boots
on tin roof drums

the clouds are sleepy
grey blankets with holes
and windows on purpose
silly god and his designs
said to call him abstract
it gives him more freedom
in his creations
then he reminds me

he is not
but has always been
the me of really me


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LeeJ
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1 posted 2005-03-11 07:32 AM


awwww, there ya go, that right side of you peeping out...onto a lawn of open waters

your words pick up my heart tenderly with adoration smiles...seeing the whole of life as a carnival...

Hugs, Good Morning and Happy Friday



Earth Angel
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2 posted 2005-03-11 07:46 AM


"the clouds are sleepy
grey blankets with holes"

~ On cloudy days, I will be forever reminded of your words.

And btw ~ your title tickled my fancy!

And knowing and being the you of you, is a beautiful thing!


EA

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2005-03-11 07:56 AM


lee j...thanks lady..it is going to be a dandy day  (I called ahead)
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EA you bless me, thank you for the eyes
and the giggletickle smile

Sunshine
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4 posted 2005-03-11 08:12 AM



There y'go, DS...sometimes
we just have to put in our order
for the day...

Mine will be sunny and windy,
blowing the last of Winter away...

inkedgoddess
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5 posted 2005-03-11 08:18 AM


silly god and his designs
said to call him abstract
it gives him more freedom
in his creations

sometimes, dark man, i think the windows are seeing thru YOUR eyes

Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2005-03-11 09:01 AM


DarkStranger~

'splinters from
and exploding sun
clapping hands
with glass fingers'


.... the imagery so rich, so full~
I felt this brilliant piece shine all over me~
*SIGH*

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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Enchantress
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7 posted 2005-03-11 09:04 AM


Wonderful morning read Dark.
Your imagery just keep getting better and better.
~Morning hugs and such~

~ Love, like magic, depends on believing. ~

suthern
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8 posted 2005-03-11 09:39 AM


Such incredible images! *S* Your smiling title issued an invitation... I'm so glad I entered! *S*
Susan
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9 posted 2005-03-11 10:24 AM


This poem delights me - and the concept of abstract - oh I like that - and the me thoughts - that he and we are interconnected - I love how you see things -

Morning   Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

vandana
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10 posted 2005-03-11 10:50 AM


good write
MGROVES
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11 posted 2005-03-11 06:21 PM


My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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