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Marshalzu
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0 posted 2005-03-07 07:13 PM


Sleepy by the sea

The sleepy tide
        trickles up the barren shore
  the waves roll in
          roll in
     forever more
            black sky, grey sea
the sleepy tide
      rolls in
  rolls up
       the barren shore
and trickles in forever more.  



Edit: Just the addition of and in the last line

[This message has been edited by Marshalzu (03-08-2005 06:15 AM).]

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1 posted 2005-03-07 09:17 PM


I love this scene...fits my mood tonight
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2 posted 2005-03-07 09:29 PM


That was a very effective visual with the lines waving back and forth. Both the presentation and your calming words were hypnotizing!

Love & Light,
EA

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3 posted 2005-03-07 11:12 PM


Enjoyed...James
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4 posted 2005-03-08 12:08 PM


I enjoyed this as well...
Marshalzu
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5 posted 2005-03-08 06:15 AM


Thank you for the replies

Andrew

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6 posted 2005-03-08 07:35 AM


makes me want to sleep by the sea~

~ARh

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7 posted 2005-03-08 07:37 AM


soothing, comfortable, could feel the lazy in the day...serenity kisses your cheek
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