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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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Almost unthinkable Lips moving closer, closer Organizing voices Covered by winter parks We froze, but lay side by side I’m sorry…my friend, I’m so sorry You reached for my hand and squeezed Whispering… “Give me a xeroxed copy of that kiss” I blushed and kissed you long and hard You promised I was safe And I was….in that time Now, we no longer sleep in the same room Pity, those summer nights we shared Needle point, looked through your front window Singing clear and fine Loved those times, the picnics our shared journals... Wrapped in a thin gown, you said you loved to listen to Breezes came in the screen Life sang for us… Kept looking through, pages of drawings You left of nude women Misused by their peers Funny how I’d spent most of my life In innocence…wondering where I’d been? Wondering where the world is...was? It moved so fast That frustrated me…that small town concept. But now, in the autumn It seems like drawings pressurize my hands Like you did, once With a kind of mysterious grace I have grown into the quietest kind of rebel One on the verge of suspension Yes, I’m a better woman because of you And death will be different Out of duty…out of some painfully fine And accomplished relinquishing…comes A stunning achievement…..”Love” I felt you before I saw you But I had a choice, so did you We were souls that floated and spun in masses Clambering inside the air Warm electrifying sparks along my neck Arms…face, & hair We abandoned human flesh And I still love to watch those secret pleasures Choreographed from somewhere far away I am a new woman because of you And that energy is inside it Repairing the most basic fabric Life knows the right things Normalcy happens whining in loud complaint Day to day life, becomes my hero Normalcy wears a different meaning For everyone else That’s ok...it’s as always been I’ll fight tooth and nail for you, my friend So that you sleep by soft lullaby In the words of her arms Grabbing the smile you reflect Kissing it soft and hard Soft muffled sounds of morning Embrace the ocean of what is… Waves gently rolling up the sides of our ships That passed in the night... Hugs to you my sweet man I still pretend I am in the warm hold of your arms And probably am…at times [This message has been edited by LeeJ (03-07-2005 09:38 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ A string and beads to sew a space To weave a cloth of human grace To sweeten times epiphany And straighten out eternity Good morning sweet. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Absolutely stunning, LeeJ. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Remarkable" ~ you took the word right out of my mind! ~ For this poem truly is remarkable. It perfectly illustrates what a fine poet you are ~ and woman. God bless you, Dear Loving Poetess who deserves the best!  Linda |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Good Morning Lee ... this is just spectacular. I think it's probably my favorite of all your wonderful writings. A keeper for sure ... hugs, Marti A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows. |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
like you m'friend  remarkable  My spirit will rise |
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zippi Member
since 2004-03-31
Posts 56California |
My dear Lee J You are in top form here! Not surprising, not for you, Oh devine artist, queen of the pen! How sweet and at the same time, how stinging! Wonderful, romantic, A true feeling, captured and told. Love you...Rene`...Zippi |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Lee J, Remarkable is a good title for such poetic passion and imagery. I couldn't put this down! It has a drive of its own! sadie |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Lee You have penned such a fine piece here which was so very much enjoyed by this reader. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
LeeJ Yes, you are remarkable! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
There is never a time that you write that it is not only stunning but most assuredly exceptional. Hugs, TD |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
The title says it...James |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Fabulous Lee..your choice of words and the way you convey them will never leave me...this has nostalgia, and a coming to terms feeling, but you do it with anyhting but a ''normal way'' of writing it, it is extraordinary and the reason i love it so much...thank you.. Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
the places we leave things in our minds then we turn the rooms and wonder how we lost them those things we left behind etch-a-shetch was my favorite toy now it is my book of prophecy enjoyed you lee j lady |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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