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parting is such sweet sorrow
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parting is such sweet sorrow |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
For you have filled this heart with such sorrow~ this night ends a soul's dream of all tomorrows~ it is a night that my eyes shed many a tear for thee~ as no other love touched these eyes with visions of a soul's love eternally~ for you are but a dream a vision for which miles and time come inbetween a touch of ones hand a warm embrace~ a kiss no other lips could erace~ there is not a day that goes by that my heart shall forget as regret deepens with a souls cry~ leaving only a hearts tearful sigh~ as parting is all but such sweet sorrows~ yet a good bye is without your love in my tomorrows~ My spirit will rise above the sea~ There will be no drowning of my soul or me~ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, this is a lovely effort, full of soft grace. I would only question one word, "eternity", thinking that maybe "eternally" [second stanza, last line] would better suit the frame of the stanza? Simply a suggestion. Yes, a very good effort! |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
The Bards title should have given an idea of what this was going to be like...very good...Romeo himself would have liked it..thank you... Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
you must of read my mind sunshine as my first thought was eternally. thankyou~ goldenrose~ thankyou for your kind reply~ My spirit will rise |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Format and rhyme were outstanding! Enjoyed.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MarciaDear~ So tenderly penned ... *sighs* here at your thoughts~ Holding you in loving thoughts~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
thankyou all for the kind replies  My spirit will rise |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is such a beautiful piece of writing, thanks for sharing it with us. Andrew |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Excellent! The love, the sorrow, to dream~ |
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saved_by_grace Member
since 2005-01-08
Posts 332In the arms of God... |
Feeling this.... ....and loving every word of it!Take care, Becka |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
bless all of you and your thoughtful replies My spirit will rise |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Oh girl...this touches  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Silky...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
MG, I found my eyes welling with tears with the sweet sorrow of your words. Loving hugs, EA |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
sadly beautiful; your presentation is wonderful; sadie |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
The poem in entirety is special, but these are even more... as parting is all but such sweet sorrows~ yet a good bye is without your love in my tomorrows~ |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
A real melody, M Groves! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
BLESS YOU ALL My spirit will rise |
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