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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2005-03-05 07:56 AM


Dieing Embers

The embers lay a soft chambray
A dusty grey of times display
Yet in the cracks lay fires light
In memory of a blaze of bright

Another way of life’s transform
Reduced into a common norm
Waiting for the breeze to blow
To change it into newer sew

Transformation bends the lay
Into other forms of stay
Challenging the mind of man
Assigning man its caravan

It is the structure of adjust
Transcending mind to what it must
And in that transcendental wile
Is the nature of the guile?

So if I make you smile a bit
It’s all the art of symbols wit


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1 posted 2005-03-05 07:59 AM


morning sir
a smile upon my face~
to you a warm embrace~

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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And who would know better
than the Artist himself?

Good morning, our Sy!






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3 posted 2005-03-05 08:54 AM


Good Saturday morning Seymour!
Enjoyed this lovely write.
hugs, Chris

Love can sometimes be magic. But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion.
~ Javan

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2005-03-05 09:10 AM


yes!

"So if I make you smile a bit
It’s all the art of symbols wit"

*curtsy*  you make me smile whenever I read you  

(seriously, I wonder how the heck you do it every day, then I just smile 'cause I'm glad you do).


"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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5 posted 2005-03-05 09:22 AM


Another way of life’s transform
Reduced into a common norm
Waiting for the breeze to blow
To change it into newer sew


She finds Knight in every man
watching eyes to read the know.
With needle, thread upon each morn
the newer of, will aptly sew.

To bring to He a (Sigh's)relief,
in turn of words, in twist of lore.
'Tis only time, a moment's share
You are to She, a *smile* and more...

Lady Ollyne

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6 posted 2005-03-05 09:48 AM


Good day Sey...more fine words from the rhymester..thank you..

Goldenrose.


Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.)

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2005-03-05 10:24 AM


MGROVES
A warm embrace, thank you.

Sunshine
Good morning love.

Chris
And a lovely morning to you.

Susan  
It's because I see you here evey day.

Lady  
Now that is a lovely if I ever read one.


Goldenrose
My pleasure, thank you.

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8 posted 2005-03-05 11:17 AM


Great writing

Andrew

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9 posted 2005-03-05 12:26 PM


The embers lay a soft chambray
A dusty grey of times display

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

ya had me from hello...
could those opening lines be any cooler?
yes...your word play, internal rhymes and assonance get me every time... and yes...your symbols are the wile of me smile.  


This was pure poetic pleasure read aloud me sweet Sy-guy.

*winkiewinkie*

one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ...
~ take only memories ... leave only footprints ~

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2005-03-05 12:44 PM


Andrew,
Thank you, thank you.

JM,
"your symbols are the wile of me smile."
Speaking of cool.
Winkiewinkie   

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Seymour Tabin
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12 posted 2005-03-05 08:42 PM


passing,
Thank you sweety.

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