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BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

0 posted 2005-03-05 01:20 AM



You never wrote a poem for me

they were always for her  
inspired by your endless desire,
wrapped into one.
Oddly enough,  I miss her musings
and feel her pain as my own.

I learned to let go
losing myself
leaving lasting impressions
in a hush of whispers and wispy breaths,
pressed against your lips.

While sitting at that window seat
watching the sun go down on me.
Stuck on you in the heat of the moment
like sweat sticks to vinyl
that was all wet to begin with.

I loved you like no other
so many summers ago,
but I have nothing to remember you by,
because during that torrid time
and passionate fire

You never wrote a poem for me.

© Copyright 2005 BluesSerenade - All Rights Reserved
EagleOne
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1 posted 2005-03-05 02:03 AM


Powerful! Always a pleasure to read you. Take care!

"A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain" ~ BDC

Honeybunch
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2 posted 2005-03-05 05:15 AM


Bluesy - someone once wrote a poem for me but what's more important is the trail of emotion left in a heart.  We walk that path regardless of words on a page which are subject to change.  You have memories forever as I do - now we just need to learn something positive from them.  Have I told you how much I like your writing?       
MGROVES
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3 posted 2005-03-05 05:19 AM


enjoyed this

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

miscellanea
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4 posted 2005-03-05 08:24 AM


Bluesy,
  You write the sting very well. It's what's in the heart, not what's necessarily in writing that counts.  In my case, someone gave me a book of poems upon his leaving, but then the poems were not ripe in my heart.  It saddens me I was unappreciative, not more gracious.  Words just are words without proper timing, I guess.  Regardless, I understand your poem, "Stuck on You"   Great write.  Loved your reference to vinyl seats!

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
5 posted 2005-03-05 02:02 PM


Hey, thanks very much you guys, I really appreciate your nice replies.  
I was thinking that perhaps this little post of mine
belongs under Ratleaders thread in the lounge.

*gasp*

Martie
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6 posted 2005-03-05 05:50 PM


Lori

A poem from the heart...filled with feeling, does not belong in a lame poem thread!     

passing shadows
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7 posted 2005-03-05 05:56 PM


I understand this very well
MGROVES
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8 posted 2005-03-05 05:58 PM


  
no one ever wrote a poem for me
that actually came from heart~
just words they found from another
page~
but as said before, they left trails of memories and joy for my heart to always follow. and never forget

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

sweetpoetess
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9 posted 2005-03-05 06:17 PM


I understand this on very well. Awesome write.

Poetry is beauty in words.

Susan
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10 posted 2005-03-05 06:29 PM


feeling you - and understanding the longing of if only's

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

inkedgoddess
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11 posted 2005-03-06 11:08 PM


I loved you like no other
so many summers ago,
but I have nothing to remember you by,
because during that torrid time
and passionate fire




like no other
o boy
just crying the blues along with you

blondielocks
tossing another box of kleenex out to you my dear

suthern
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12 posted 2005-03-07 03:05 PM


To love... and not inspire... while others do *S* This doesn't qualify as a lame write, lady... too many of us identify! LOL
JamesMichael
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13 posted 2005-03-07 04:18 PM


I know...there were some poems that I wanted also...or just some words on paper...James
ctowen
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14 posted 2005-03-08 08:31 PM


It's amazing how one's heart can inspire the music of life within another ....


         ... you have captured the softness and reality of the Blues!
                      Thanks for all that you inspire.    

[This message has been edited by ctowen (03-08-2005 11:02 PM).]

jwesley
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15 posted 2005-03-08 10:03 PM


well now...I wrote several poems for you, but filled them with pronouns so you'd never guess they were from me. Clever, don't you think?

Kidding my friend, or maybe I'm not....

Beautiful write Blusey...always enjoy your words.

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16 posted 2005-03-08 11:02 PM


Never wrote a poem for you.....that you knew about. Lots of us write poems we don't show anyone, and I'd bet big that your poems are there, if only you had seen them. It's hard to imagine they wouldn't be, and I'm a pretty imaginative guy in a pinch....

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HopeS
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17 posted 2005-03-08 11:19 PM


Understanding this ..... yes and I wrote plenty for him

Hope


J.Samm
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18 posted 2005-03-09 03:39 AM


well done, painful but well done. i love how you started and ended the poem by the same striking line.

you never wrote a poem for me

Gentle Spirit
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19 posted 2005-03-09 08:13 AM


singing the blues with you today gal....I understand and FEEl this with you hon.  HUGS
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20 posted 2005-03-09 09:48 AM


awesome write Bluesylady.
I do believe "someone" did write a little something special for you.
hugs, Chris

"Nunc scio quit sit amor."
~ Virgil

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