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Professor Gloom
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0 posted 2005-03-04 05:33 PM


I ponder,
As leaving friends and kin
I wonder
As I float away agin,
I wander
On the breath of the wind,
And add salty tears to the sea
As the shore bound do for me.

Fill my sail full
Let me feel currents pull
Rocking over wave out of sight
Still remembering your touch last night.
I will return to you some day
But ocean’s destiny has its way,
My cargo is empty and my sail is full.

Gloom


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miscellanea
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1 posted 2005-03-04 06:04 PM


Very pretty, AD.  Very pretty...
      
              ~miscellanea

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2 posted 2005-03-04 06:09 PM


"Let me feel currents pull
Rocking over wave out of sight
Still remembering your touch last night.
I will return to you some day
But ocean’s destiny has its way,"


love this part...and yes, I agree, very pretty

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3 posted 2005-03-04 06:39 PM


indeed it does have its way
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4 posted 2005-03-04 09:19 PM


Very nice Professor. Enjoyed. Chris

Love can sometimes be magic. But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion.
~ Javan

Professor Gloom
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5 posted 2005-03-05 05:58 AM


Thank you, miscellanea,
Pleased you enjoyed

Thank you, Sea,
You are kind with your praise

Thank you, passing shadows,
For your kind comment

Thank you, Nightshade,
Glad you liked this

Gloom

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2005-03-05 08:57 AM


So nice Gloomy!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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7 posted 2005-03-05 10:04 AM



I enjoyed this very much, Professor.
It calls for a sequel...

Where does the merchant find himself
in the next few weeks...

does he hunger to return
to familiar shores?

So much exploring to do with this one.

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8 posted 2005-03-05 11:53 AM


a lovely vision for ones eyes this beautiful morn

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Professor Gloom
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9 posted 2005-03-05 12:31 PM


Thank you, Susan
Pleased you liked

Thank you, Sunshine
As you request a sequel comes
Of at least part one
We’ll see how he does on part two

Thank you, MGROVES,
Glad you enjoyed my vision of words

Gloom



Zinsser
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10 posted 2005-03-06 10:32 AM


This is beautiful....
not gloomy at all  : )

LeeJ
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11 posted 2005-03-07 07:50 AM


But ocean’s destiny has its way,
My cargo is empty and my sail is full.


Destiny does have her ways with us, doesn't she?  Especially if we pare with someone who regards us theirs and chooses to stand in our way...it is a mighty ugly storm which then prevails...

I loved this, as it sparks many feelings and view points....tremendous write

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