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Greeneyes
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0 posted 2005-03-02 05:15 PM



{Emerald carpet-- that green
deep jade along the mire}


~

We should share the quiet
when the sky is blue  
and oceans mirror back  white
clouds glow orange
as far as the eyes can see

You speak of butterflies,
how they bleed color
          fluttering in the horizon
shimmering gold tones
of xanadu--
of some other occasion
when once the world
was still


   Rearrange the shadows with me
between flowers & fragments of sun  
the windows will share   shades  of green


even after rain--


You the seed,       darkened by desire
inside early flesh of midnight
in stillness remain     realm of light
upon the waters surface
as I await --


respirez cet air my
toile foncée -- verdissez ce vert

manière d'observation de coupure de nuit pour
lune

~
~~*~~ (french lines)
(breathe this air    my
dark canvas-- green

    watching  night break -way for the
moon)


~
(repost-requested)


~~*~~
I'm Standing on a bridge
I'm waitin in the dark
I thought that you'd be here by now
Theres nothing but the rain
~~**~~

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with you
1 posted 2005-03-02 05:42 PM


this is stunning...I don't think I've read it before?? But I sure enjoyed it now!
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2 posted 2005-03-02 07:25 PM


When I read you, I often think to myself "grace"...

(That puts you in the same category as Martie and Cpat, as well as a few others I am more than likely forgetting momentarily)

This time, I thought, "amazing grace".

Thanks for posting this again.

Lovely.

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3 posted 2005-03-02 10:31 PM


Exquisite...love this.
Thank you for reposting pretty lady~

~ Love, like magic, depends on believing. ~

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displaced
4 posted 2005-03-02 10:58 PM



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5 posted 2005-03-03 05:53 AM


Very good...thank you..

Goldenrose.

Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.)

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6 posted 2005-03-03 06:20 AM


Rearrange the shadows with me
between flowers & fragments of sun  


YES!

Beautiful.

Maree

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

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7 posted 2005-03-03 07:43 AM


you know I love it when you do French gal...
(and still never figured that one from years ago out....lmao! )

You are beauty, inside and out Lady...

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8 posted 2005-03-03 07:51 AM


you take the reader into the depths of woman and feed the reader with our hearts so perfectly...so openly and all I can do is shake my head and say Phweeeeh, what a write!
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9 posted 2005-03-03 08:16 AM


Thank you for allowing me to repost this.....I appreciate your heartfelt replies....love to all it's a beautiful day !
~~

Karen Check your email...



~~*~~
I'm Standing on a bridge
I'm waitin in the dark
I thought that you'd be here by now
Theres nothing but the rain
~~**~~

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10 posted 2005-06-17 01:55 AM


Very nice!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." A. Brink


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state of mind
11 posted 2005-06-17 10:40 AM


enjoyed
bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

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12 posted 2005-06-17 06:38 PM


i read k's reply and there's nothing more i could add to that. without a doubt, one of the most graceful writers on on the blue
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13 posted 2005-06-17 07:42 PM


Enjoyed...James
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14 posted 2005-06-17 11:00 PM


Grace, yes! and delicate

Glad I stopped by this evening

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15 posted 2005-06-18 12:07 PM


My God, it seems as if we all have Utopia on our minds . . .
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16 posted 2005-06-18 11:21 PM


Oh my, I am at a loss for words. Bravo!
SG

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17 posted 2005-06-23 12:03 PM


Had I known it existed, I'd have requested too. A lesson from beginning to end, on the silken science of laying, so gently and precisely that the plan disappears within the execution, words on paper.

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18 posted 2005-06-23 11:01 AM


thank you for revisiting this, the comments are heartwarming, and makes writing worth it!

love and hugssss to all.....

I keep a fragrance bottle my
muse gave me when I met him
in endless winter and he
settled me into remembering
who I am.

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