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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2005-03-02 03:26 PM


1:1 This Land And Bones

It is this land that holds the bones of our past
Where buried are the ones who spoke before us
And found these trees to give shade
The meadows to be grass that allowed herds to grow
Yet I am a stranger to it
As I am a stranger to my heart
For in neither do I any longer know the paths
That lead to places safe
When the storms come from the clouds
Or that wend their ways through the rough stones
Scattered by the hand of an angry god
And would make us lame with a cruel turn of ankle

I look at both
The landscape where my mother nursed me to grow
And that place inside where I would be fed today
And close my eyes to the hills of cedar
And my mind to the plains of want
To find the words that explain to Allah how
I in a loss of tongue cannot form the words to pray
Nor wipe from my eyes the dust of this vantage
So I might see my way to where,
Come the cooler nights I could cradle the love
Against my stomach
Throwing stray leg over hers
And keep us both warm

Allah is not my Sheppard here
   And this valley grows longer in shadow
So I walk with tremulous tread these paths
And think of her


1:2   Eloquence And Sand

My soul cries to yours
With a voice lacking the patience of Job
Though my tongue is tied, as was Moses’
When he in his earnest way
Searched in the fire and chiseled stone
To reflect commandments
Telling us not to covet what we do not own
Nor to kill or steal

Slow these passing syllables seem to grow
From my mouth
While I feel the pull of you inside me
And reach my words to the ways
Which might explain such stirred blessings
As the touch of you inside

Here the date palms grow
To feed any who might pluck from among the fronds
Enough fruit to fill their throats with the sweet
Brought by such caress of sun and placid rain
As let the trees bear fruit

I am barren in my own beg
  To provide the food to satisfy this need inside
For you have not lent me the dew to sustain the root of me
Nor spread in light the warmth of your skin
To please my eyes

I have measured my speech
  To find the distance between your shadow and mine
And know the subtle ways in which we hide from night
But know my own denial of Moses’ laws
   Will not allow me to absolve the way
I covet indeed the way you move in me

If my tongue is freed of this stutter
And I find the rain
  I will try again to say the words
To pray

I might touch you
                 Once again



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1 posted 2005-03-02 03:30 PM


...Yet I am a stranger to it
As I am a stranger to my heart

...I in a loss of tongue cannot form the words to pray

...Allah is not my Sheppard here
   And this valley grows longer in shadow
So I walk with tremulous tread these paths
And think ...

...Slow these passing syllables seem to grow
From my mouth
While I feel the pull of you inside me

...I am barren in my own beg

...If my tongue is freed of this stutter
And I find the rain
  I will try again to say the words
To pray

I might touch you
                 Once again

~*~

When you write, you press the blood...

and when we read, we receive the blessing.



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2 posted 2005-03-02 03:33 PM


Yet I am a stranger to it
As I am a stranger to my heart
For in neither do I any longer know the paths
That lead to places safe
When the storms come from the clouds
Or that wend their ways through the rough stones
Scattered by the hand of an angry god
And would make us lame with a cruel turn of ankle


when you write, we are all blessed in your gifts....well done sir..

very well done.....

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 2005-03-02 03:35 PM


kind ma'am... kind words....

  part of a two chapter series I have been writing..along with a third chapter of Lamentations.... most, I am simply not comfortable sharing... and these..probably two of the better ones that began the story...  

  as for blessings...hardly a blessing to read my words... often they themselves I think more a sin...

your kind words and the read..are appreciated.

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4 posted 2005-03-02 04:13 PM


Ron

If your words are sin, then let me sin...for they do touch me and so many with something deeply profound that you squeeze from the soul of you.  Thank you for posting this...I'd like to see the rest!  

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5 posted 2005-03-02 04:21 PM


I echo all of the above Sir, your words...help me breathe.



Mxx

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6 posted 2005-03-02 05:07 PM


there is so much emotion in these.....you already know how touching they are.... you have a masterful touch with words.....

~~*~~
I'm Standing on a bridge
I'm waitin in the dark
I thought that you'd be here by now
Theres nothing but the rain
~~**~~

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7 posted 2005-03-02 06:01 PM


You already know how I feel about these, and I can think of nothing further to add.

But I wanted to say thank you for sharing them here.

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8 posted 2005-03-02 06:21 PM


Fantastic...James
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9 posted 2005-03-03 08:33 AM


As I am a stranger to my heart
For in neither do I any longer know the paths
That lead to places safe


this reads like a psalm, Ron.

I have so much to learn.

Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2005-03-03 08:45 AM


and the psalms just keep getting better


a pleasure to read you Ron..
to writhe in your religion
if for just a moment on some mornings

before god walks in an empty eden


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11 posted 2005-03-03 09:06 AM


This was an exceptional read...truely amazing...loved this, and your courage, spark, dedication...amazing!!!!!
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12 posted 2005-03-03 09:07 AM


When all the superlatives have been used..
may I just add a humble 'thank you'.
Well done Ron, very well done!

~ Love, like magic, depends on believing. ~

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13 posted 2005-03-03 09:09 AM


"Slow these passing syllables seem to grow
From my mouth
While I feel the pull of you inside me
And reach my words to the ways
Which might explain such stirred blessings
As the touch of you inside
"

~*~

"I have measured my speech
  To find the distance between your shadow and mine

And know the subtle ways in which we hide from night
But know my own denial of Moses’ laws
   Will not allow me to absolve the way
I covet indeed the way you move in me

If my tongue is freed of this stutter
And I find the rain
  I will try again to say the words
To pray

I might touch you
                 Once again


Ron, you are so amazing....this moves me, and goes directly to my heart of hearts...I need to keep this....

Susan Caldwell
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14 posted 2005-03-04 02:13 PM


You know I love these.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

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15 posted 2005-03-07 02:57 PM


After reading through twice... I was drawn back to the title...

You leave no soul untouched, my friend... I agree with earlier comments... blessings.

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16 posted 2005-03-09 07:46 PM


Ron,

this is quite polished work. Congrats! Hope you submit it for publication somewhere.


and hope all is well with you!

Corinne

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17 posted 2005-03-10 07:05 AM


usually I don't read anything that has the word "chapter" in the title...don't visit Prose much either

but if it's from you, I'll click

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