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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes 
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I am cautious and curious I wonder where the world turns next I hear the snow faling in June I see the camerbert moon reflected in her eyes I want the world of happiness for my kids I am cautious and curious I pretend there are nights in white satin I feel Santa Claus lied I touch the velvet softness of the night I worry the injuries won't heal I cry at the tears of children I am cautious and curious I understand changes aren't permenant I say your thoughts guide you home I dream the big win in life I try to understand the struggles I hope the fight is in honor I am cautious and curious This was interesting... maybe I'll have my daughter, Stottbear try it The challenge is at: /pip/Forum7/HTML/000645.html My original is at: /pip/Forum80/HTML/003725.html In the wooden chair Beside my window I wear a face born in the falling rain |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like this "new" repost, Ringo! Very good, and yes, Stottbear should give it a go, and see how she grows! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh, that was tough the first time, awesome job, Brad. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well done!! Would love to see your daughter try this one. Hugs~Nancy ~ Love, like magic, depends on believing. ~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Well done and much enjoyed. Might give this a go myself ! hugs, Chris Love can sometimes be magic. But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"cautious and curious" smiling and nodding I'm at war with myself too, sweets. Thanks for bringing this around again.  |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Sunshine- Thanks for the kind words. I'm not sure if I'll get her this weekens, however, she'll do it the next time. Sue- You know I always appreciate your thoughts. Thanks mucho. Nancy- You are always too kind about my writing. I will have my daughter post hers as soon as it's done. Chris- Thanks for reading this. I look forward to seeing your version. Karen- I truly appreciate your words. Thanks again. In the wooden chair |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Enjoyed this write, my favorite lines: "I understand changes aren't permenant I say your thoughts guide you home" |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I too like the cautious and curious - nice blend - the challenge is a great one too - it gives a little peek into the insides -  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"I understand changes aren't permenant I say your thoughts guide you home" really liked this part... enjoyed.. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok, ya got me with this: I feel Santa Claus lied and my offering is posted . . . |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I pretend there are nights in white satin I feel Santa Claus lied I touch the velvet softness of the night I worry the injuries won't heal I cry at the tears of children this speaks volumes Ringo, thanks for this challenge, I have posted my offering too. |
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sweetpoetess Member
since 2005-02-27
Posts 428Florida |
Awesomely done. Poetry is beauty in words. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
D.Lester- Thanks for the kind words, and thanks for the e-mail. It was much appreciated. Susan- Thank you for reading. I agree it does give that look... maybe a bit too much. SEA- Yet more kind words. They are always welcome. Thank you. Suzie- My favorite line... You have my reply to yours. Great to see you again. GS- Mucho thanks. You are much to kind. Sweetpoetess- Thank you very much. In the wooden chair Beside my window I wear a face born in the falling rain [This message has been edited by Ringo (03-02-2005 09:00 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ringo Santa Claus lied!!! ?? This was great...I'm gonna try it again myself when I have a minute. Thanks! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hmmm, I may have to attempt this challenge. But not tonight. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I pretend there are nights in white satin I used to do that, too... now I feel I'm turning into one of those bedsitter people who look back and lament. *S* I like this very much! *S* |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
I thought you were nuts to begin with and now this picture . . . *smile* |
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