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kayjay
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0 posted 2005-02-27 10:17 AM


Pink dawn happening
Rays spread like flower petals
Greying clouds hover



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1 posted 2005-02-27 10:22 AM


very nice. yes, those clouds for us contain more snow I am afraid. hugs, Chris

Love can sometimes be magic. But magic can sometimes... just be an illusion.
~ Javan

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2 posted 2005-02-27 10:23 AM


I like this very much!
I think one too many syllables in last line (if writing a senryu)

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

kayjay
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3 posted 2005-02-27 10:32 AM


Thank you, Chris, your presence is always a present.

Interloper:  Thank you for your keen eye! and for signing

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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4 posted 2005-02-27 10:34 AM



Clouds covering state
Emotions coloring time
All a rosy hue

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5 posted 2005-02-27 11:43 AM


Pretty.  I'd never thought of rays spreading like flower petals--I like!

           miscellanea

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6 posted 2005-02-27 11:45 AM


soft sunrise colors
muted into pastel hues
springtime does prevail

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7 posted 2005-02-27 11:47 AM


The sun is soon up
visiting this side of day
good morning to you

  Hi Ken!

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8 posted 2005-02-27 11:49 AM


Wonderful one Ken!!
We have snow clouds moving in tonight.
Hey..a sunny day today though!
~Hugs & Smiles to you m'friend~

~ The most beautiful poem ever written..
    was written by you in my heart ~

kayjay
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9 posted 2005-02-27 11:54 AM



Greying skies gather
Precipitation threatens
Oregon sunshine


Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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10 posted 2005-02-27 05:40 PM


morning described perfectly here
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11 posted 2005-02-28 06:33 AM


sounds beautiful to me~~~

M

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