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1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2005-02-25 02:30 PM



Stop

stop, just stop
holding your love over my head
promising that your love
has a possibility to be mine
did you think I would die inside
yes      it breaks my heart
things have hurt me past pride
and this can be such a paradise
standing on the edge of hell
a current of pure electricity
the movement in emotions clinging
flowing to you cellophaned to static
that runs the very length of me
how difficult do you think it is
to pour myself out so exposed
pretending
just standing in your judgments
things all pretty on the outside
yet, all so empty on the in
this is the simple truth
I do feel too much
but you have underestimated me
and I don’t deserve any of this
playing on my emotions
clouding my better judgment
and maybe I am more
woman than you bargained for

just some words cut out
from the diary of my heart



© Copyright 2005 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-02-25 02:34 PM


how difficult do you think it is
to pour myself out so exposed
pretending
just standing in your judgments
things all pretty on the outside
yet, all so empty on the in
this is the simple truth
I do feel too much
but you have underestimated me
and I don’t deserve any of this
playing on my emotions
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Helen, it is so very sad that people play on
others emotions, and how we feel when we are being underestimated.  I understand this one all to well gal...

Hugs to you.  Very nicely penned H.  

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
2 posted 2005-02-25 05:20 PM


*hand in yours*
BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
3 posted 2005-02-25 05:24 PM


did you think I would die inside
yes      it breaks my heart
things have hurt me past pride

Not my kind of paradise, but I hear you Helen.

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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369
Deep in the heart
4 posted 2005-02-26 07:18 PM


now think about this
stopping in the name of love
can cause big problems

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Opoetry4me
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since 2002-10-11
Posts 126
Dixon, Ky USA
5 posted 2005-02-26 10:23 PM


Which is harder to start or stop? Very nice piece.
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