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ecrivan
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0 posted 2005-02-25 07:51 AM



The thought that stayed
an outreached hand clenched
eyeglasses were broken then
company did not want to move on.


the moment lingered
the issue was a broken hinge
an arm detached from the main frame
the moment lingered
the glasses were not the same.


knowing herself to be in a trance,
an acrued collection of thoughts
that refused to adapt to
humm of waiters around the tables
the moment stayed
until another hand gently pushed
she remarked
"silly me,
my hand is still clenched,
must move on to another sketch.
were you expecting two bodies
to linger into the night"?
she'd asked the shadow seated before her

Here a hand demonstrated a visual plight.
then both left and right ones
returned to their original folded position.





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DavePage
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1 posted 2005-02-25 03:26 PM


I'm sorry that others don't understand what you are writing.

I talked to my wife to night that I would love Python to 'do the oscars'.

I suppose people entrench and quality gets missed.

dave

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2 posted 2005-02-25 03:53 PM


Your words always leaves me thinking and wondering.   Take this for instance:

" The thought that stayed
an outreached hand clenched
eyeglasses were broken then
company did not want to move on."

Your message very creatively said.


ecrivan
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3 posted 2005-02-27 05:38 PM


Dave,

you shouldn't be sorry that much of what I write is not understood or misunderstood, I don't write on simple themes nor do I expect
many hits on my poems from readers expecting
light love poems.


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4 posted 2005-02-27 11:36 PM


ah, hearing the depth of absolute silence that necessarily follows this hand gesturing scene
*touching the soul on the screen*

ecrivan
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5 posted 2005-02-28 12:34 PM


agreed, so many talk with gestures and their fixations are even more pronounced through moments like this...


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