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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2005-02-22 07:42 AM



Genesis


undrape me as dawn
slowly whispers at windows
where darkness tenderly loses control
morning is the very reason
for breath to be taken away
in simple touch I feel so much
when your lips grace my skin
come now my garden Eden’s passion
expose this connection to eve
next to you lays your rib


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LeeJ
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1 posted 2005-02-22 07:47 AM


outstanding, gave me chills...loved this
passing shadows
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2 posted 2005-02-22 10:18 AM


powerful!
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3 posted 2005-02-22 01:02 PM


next to you lays your rib

Oh, yes. *S* This left me breathless... it's superb!

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Deep in the heart
4 posted 2005-02-23 12:44 PM


WOW!
This is fabulous!
I take my Exodus...

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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5 posted 2005-02-23 03:49 PM


Anyone who can make the creation as seductive and sensual as this has my vote for Creator(ess)

Great Job!!!!

In the wooden chair
Beside my window
I wear a face born in the falling rain

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6 posted 2005-03-29 02:35 PM


kryptonite

-majnu
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7 posted 2005-03-29 06:20 PM


outstanding! I don't know what perfection is, but this must be close to it, if not on the mark!

        miscellanea

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8 posted 2005-03-30 01:12 AM


Smiles for this....and may this Genesis never be followed by an Exodus......

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