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Dawn - a Villanelle

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Balladeer
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Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn
With rainbow's irridescent hue
Brings thoughts of you in early dawn.

Such memories to dwell upon
Are brought alive with morning's new
Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn.

The gentle sound of bird and fawn
As nature greets the world anew
Brings thoughts of you in early dawn.

Perhaps the mists of Avalon
Are touched by God to make this brew
Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn.

Your beauty was surpassed by none
And it is right that morning dew
Brings thoughts of you in early dawn.

Though years have passed since you are gone
As is the life that we once knew
Fresh dew that sparkles on the lawn
Brings thoughts of you in early dawn.
© Copyright 2005 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-21-2005 12:19 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

oh dear...deer...

wow
SmartChick
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2 posted 02-21-2005 01:22 AM       View Profile for SmartChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SmartChick's Home Page   View IP for SmartChick

This is just beautiful, Balladeer! I always enjoy reading your poetry.
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3 posted 02-21-2005 03:44 AM       View Profile for A Romantic Heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for A Romantic Heart

Your poetry is as beautiful and brilliant as ever!

~ARH

We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard

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4 posted 02-21-2005 04:16 AM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

Ever the romantic. I love it,marty
Denise
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5 posted 02-21-2005 11:24 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

There seems to be no limit to your talent. Beautifully done, Michael!
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No limits, indeed.  This is beautiful, Sir.
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Oh my....how lovely.   hugs, Chris

You said you'd give me light-
But you never told me about the fire
Stevie Nicks

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8 posted 02-21-2005 01:30 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

this paints a valentine perfectly...

Enjoyed
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This is so very lovely. *S*
Kit McCallum
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Michael, these words glide through the mind in such a fluid motion, I am truly reminded of a waltz.

This is absolutely wonderful ... the rhyme, the cadence ... oh my. You sure know how to make this gal's day. What a beautiful piece my 'Deer!

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit
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MM....you always amaze me.  
Deb
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My oh my! Now I know what you've been up to! You were laboring over writing the perfect villanelle! ~ and a very lovely and moving one it be!

So good to be reading your poetry again. You certainly are a versatile writer and I enjoy this poem very much.

Hugs with love,
Linda
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I very much enjoyed this.
Susan Caldwell
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A wonderfully written villanelle, Michael.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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My thanks to you all! I have always enjoyed villanelles for the rhyme scheme and the difficulty of making them interesting with so many repeating lines. Thank you for enjoying it
Magnus
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Hey 'Deer,  can I give ya a hearty ho ho
and pass the rum....gosh, but you have
definitely done a whale of a job on this
one.  Well done, sir...
Elizabeth Santos
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17 posted 02-21-2005 10:59 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

One of the most beautiful villanelles I have ever read. Thank you
Liz
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simply perfect...but I've come to expect nothing less from you oh master of poetry
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19 posted 02-22-2005 02:49 PM       View Profile for jellybeans   Email jellybeans   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jellybeans

beautiful, and even more so the form...
good to read you my friend
Titia Geertman
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Oh boy oh boy, would I be a happy Dutchie if someone would ever write a poem like that for me.

You certainly have a romantic heart Deer and you're right, the Villanelle is such a beautiful form to write in.

Thank you for sharing your gift with us.

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

JL
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Absolutely wonderful!

JL

Elizabeth Santos
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I enjoyed reading this a second time.
Very lovely indeed.
Nan and I had a great time together and with LeeJ. I hope more poets can join us nect time
Take care
Liz
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What better way to write anew than to use a great theme into a great format... You're the bestest, Balladeer..

I like the unexpected twist at the end too - Got any more good stuff hiding up that sleeve?  
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'Tis nigh a masterpiece, methinks

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

 
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