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Once Upon a Time |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Once upon a time long long ago there lived yes lived a child who was real not fancy dwelling with imaginary friends across the fields of green with the dogs and later on the porch bringing the coyotes to the door wagging Oh she was wild you see torn from something I couldn’t name but I feared it came from me from the place where I held her with nine times a month of troubles in tears from the wrong turns and smoke from a pipe I thought fit my state filling the white room with her scrunched face and a sound I had heard coming from memories closet where I kept the light on She wanted to die she said when she was only five and had barely begun herself how could she know the meaning of the word, death? Could she see into the depth of me past the lie of flowers on the table into the wetting bed of every night to be in a childhood just like mine ? I can still see the joy in her bounce across the big highway at the light holding my hand across the trestle to the sand where the ocean fell into her lap just like mine Once upon a time long long ago there lived a child ------------- In loving memory of Michelle [This message has been edited by Martie (02-20-2005 08:04 PM).] |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
quote: .....and she still does...in you, and in herself. Thank you for this poem, Martie...it is a gift to everyone who will ever read it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The woman now...ready and lending the hand to hold.... You know I know... and how much I will in turn hold the child's mother. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You have me sort of speechless....takes a lot to get that... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
If I touch the screen in sigh, will you understand why this one touched me so deeply? |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Oh, Martie! Yes, just "Oh, Martie" with love! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie You tug at my heart. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, your poems of MIchelle are among the most touching I have ever read...this one is a perfect example  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"She wanted to die she said when she was only five and had barely begun herself how could she know the meaning of the word, death?" close to the beginning and near the end, we tend to remember and to understand; it is in the vast wilderness of the unwritten middle that we often get confused. A difficult write, I am sure. An insightful read. *hug* |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Martie, on this day out of all the days, and in this year out of all the years... I wish you peace. Peace, and a measure of joy, that is my wish for you. I wish that for you every day and every year, but today...... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I believe, truely believe, the child, with hands and arms outstreached....is in the mother's heart, and you hers... Martie...hugs to you marvelous poet...hugs |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Once upon a time long long ago there lived a child And still does... especially in beautiful words like this... penned from a heart of love. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Martie, thank you for this incredibly touching write. She knew the meaning of LIFE. We are more ... Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I can still see the joy in her bounce across the big highway at the light holding my hand across the trestle to the sand where the ocean fell into her lap just like mine Once upon a time long long ago there lived a child ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I can still see the joy in her bounce across the big highway at the light holding my hand across the trestle to the sand where the ocean fell into her lap just like mine Thank you for sharing her memory, Martie. They sparkle so.....enough to leave the reader blinking back a tear. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Though I didn't know her, I feel bits of her in your poetry. She is lovely. Thank you for sharing your heart, Martie. I learn so much about tenderness and love from you. miscellanea |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Still sends me back, back, back to shed the tears I did not have time for then. Thank you, marty |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
January, Michelle, March, April, May ...  Oh she was wild you see torn from something I couldn’t name but I feared it came from me from the place where I held her I imagine she is looking very much like you too by now Martie. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
gut wrenching Martie. I believe and try to remember that we choose long before we are born to this life just how and when we leave it... and we don't leave until we have served our purpose. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
How well you keep your lost child alive for us!! As she has touched you, you've touched us. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
a powerful tug....but full of love for a precious soul.... ~~*~~ |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
sending hugs....this reads with much understanding, despite the questions of why that will go unanswered in this life time |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh she lives on Martie, in you and here at passions, in us all. Love you Mxx and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - you invite us into the reality of Michelle so very many ways and so wonderfully - she lives forever in you and in all of us you have shared her with - Paul |
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