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inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2005-02-17 11:08 PM

I watched the sky rewind
and heard the birds
of twilight sing
and gazed out far
through windowed eyes,

in conversation's flight,
the arch above
had morphed from beige
to teal to the bruise of blue,

and climbing trees
sponged up the dark,
becoming lines of black
the falling sky could hang on to,

and then paraded centerstage,

i read a glossary
of possibility,
in the sun's emancipation,
as it slipped behind
this windowed view,

but it died within
the changing hues,

and i realized, love,
i would never
capture you.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (02-19-2005 11:05 PM).]

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

1 posted 2005-02-18 07:55 AM

nice, made me feel sad~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2005-02-18 08:04 AM

inkedgoddess
It read like an echo to me and echoes come back.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2005-02-18 08:14 AM

"and i realized, love,
that i would never
capture you"

perfectly worded.

a gut wrenching feeling..

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-02-18 08:19 AM

A glowing case in point, when the mind meets the soul and allows
That girl, is true love

if we'd practice this more oft...I believe human beings would be well on the road to peace...

wonderfully descriptive

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2005-02-19 01:52 PM

gawd

what a write

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

6 posted 2005-02-19 03:09 PM

They say when a wild thing is captured...it dies. Well done girlie.
TD

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

7 posted 2005-02-19 03:12 PM

loved that ending - well done

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Indigo
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

8 posted 2005-02-19 03:46 PM

Your gifted prose cuts to the quick and reveals the sinews of emotion laid bare. Loved this.

Indigo

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

9 posted 2005-02-19 05:14 PM

i read a glossary
of possibility,
in the sun's emancipation,
as it slipped behind
this windowed view,

Great thoughts, masterfully penned, dear Michele.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

iliana
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since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2005-02-19 05:24 PM

Michelle, you write with such grace and hue.

.....jo

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

11 posted 2005-02-19 06:24 PM

Amazing write!

~Alli~

*AIM = Alli4000* Journal!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

12 posted 2005-02-19 09:58 PM

thanks for the visit and the support

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

13 posted 2005-02-19 10:53 PM

Love this. It speaks to my heart. It is a feeling I know well. One that may recede...but never leaves. Yes...well written inkedgoddess.

bklynboy
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since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

14 posted 2005-02-20 07:15 AM

Thanks for a peek inside your window

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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USA

15 posted 2005-02-20 10:32 AM

good read

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

16 posted 2005-02-20 03:20 PM

inkedgoddess,
I love the tones of earth in this, the softness... Yet, I was woven into the cloth of your poem, feeling the teal to bruise of blue. Beautifully penned, as I've grown to expect from you.
miscellanea

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