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Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle

0 posted 2005-02-17 06:27 PM


Trivial

Cool waters speak French while
pebbles tan to the reality burn.
Her fantasies are frivolous,
composing done-before songs
reeking of mock sighs.

The canopied glow of candles
creeps over his charm and
canticles hail their free reign.
Suffer consequences with no boundaries?
Hear the cadence of gentle beats in
lazy waving--
Easy comes the crest.

Her fingers splay their confession while
winds compose ripples of cheek-warmed highs.
"Mon Cheri" She closes her eyes to the
conjuring, to the compelling Live! Live!
The futility in his voice is unmistaken;
the encompassing illconformity.

"Trivial," he signs
dismissively.

I bought my share of mistakes so I might see some interest.
~Dorene

© Copyright 2005 Dorene M. Harris - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2005-02-17 07:11 PM


hi Chanson...good to see you!  I liked this, especially the impact of the last two lines.
Magnus
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2 posted 2005-02-17 09:19 PM


There is certainly nothing trivial about
this composure.  Very nicely written, such
a good ending.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2005-02-17 09:56 PM


Suffer consequences with no boundaries?


hmmm... great line there, Dorene

have missed reading you

M

passing shadows
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4 posted 2005-02-17 10:29 PM


where have you been?

you've been missed lady!

iliana
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5 posted 2005-02-17 10:54 PM


Fascinating read.  Much enjoyed.  
Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle
6 posted 2005-02-18 05:11 AM


Martie, it's very nice to see you too.

Magnus, I am happy you enjoyed.

M, I've missed you too.

passing shadows, I've been enjoying all the poems in lurk mode.

iliana, thank you.

Thank you all for the read.


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