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Goldenrose
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0 posted 2005-02-17 04:36 AM


Melody drifting on air,
sitting without a care.
May i stand awhile,
within your dream smile.

Shores with golden skies,
alive with seabird cries.
sleep sweetly soft, silent,
move in dreams, indolent.

The devil stalks me,
you will be free.
Your repose is everything,
blackness, i am sinking.

falling into your dream,
imediate illumination you beam.
Your paradise heaven sent,
exciting, your love scent.

Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.)

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A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart
1 posted 2005-02-17 04:52 AM


This was so sad...I see your saddness, and yet feel the love, the happines you get from the other person in this poem...as if they are your source of strength..of light and love.

beauty and the beast of sadness...



~ARh

We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard


passing shadows
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displaced
2 posted 2005-02-17 01:01 PM


I agree with ARH
LeeJ
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3 posted 2005-02-17 02:20 PM


well done!
Earth Angel
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Realms of Light
4 posted 2005-02-17 04:37 PM


May your descents into love always have soft landings...


EA

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
5 posted 2005-02-20 12:06 PM


exciting, your love scent.


i'm intrigued by the use of the word

scent.

i half expected, sent. but you threw me with scent.

nice choice... exciting choice..


snow

"i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly"

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
6 posted 2005-02-20 01:31 AM


Snow, personal comments of this nature about another are not appropriate as comments on someone's poetry. Thank you for your understanding.

[This message has been edited by Denise (02-21-2005 11:01 AM).]

Snow
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desert flower looking for rain
7 posted 2005-02-21 12:25 PM




Phil,

Glad you were able to read what i said before it was removed. oh how the truth is such a harsh light.

i need to learn to be more subtle. LOL.

thank you for the card.

~Snow

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