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DavePage
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0 posted 2005-02-15 03:28 PM


In heydays lost
A dying was Royal (King, Queen in any order, any sex)
And closed loop defined control
Without dynamic stimulous
To sooth dynamic souls

A weak self-destruction
Populated by enclaves
Encouraged by ensouls
To enclose a world
Into a hole

In the belief

Fools are slaves

And nothing is better than whole

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Ericc
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1 posted 2005-02-15 04:00 PM


Wow...wonderful lines Dave,
with a truly great closing.

Eric

JL
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2 posted 2005-02-15 04:03 PM


"In the belief
Fools are slaves
And nothing is better than whole"

I know that's right!
Excellent write Dave.

JL



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3 posted 2005-02-17 01:44 AM


wow!
right on the mark~


DavePage
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4 posted 2005-02-19 03:25 AM


Ericc

Wow...wonderful lines Dave,
with a truly great closing.

Eric

Thanks Eric but I dont class it with some of the words you write.

Dave



JL

"In the belief
Fools are slaves
And nothing is better than whole"

I know that's right!
Excellent write Dave.

JL

Thanks JL - I think you are being a bit kind here.

Dave



MGROVES

wow!
right on the mark~

Thanks Marsha

Dave



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