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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2005-02-15 02:29 PM


There is this feeling left
   a sort of emptiness

when your words are not heard

    Silence now beckons to me

come sit in this solitude
and quiet of moment.....


and I can feel you there,
but also here
held in hush
of serene breeze.

     Sometimes this silence deafens me

just one word.....

   and a longing felt
to hear the song
in your voice
and look into the softness
of eyes that see
      the all of me

tenderly sharing moments
of tranquility

that would replace this stale air
    that I now breathe....

captured within your gaze
revived in the beauty of your spirit
and warmed from your light

and in your kiss
    finding the first breath
             of new life that I breathe...



choose to chance the rapids,
dare to dance the tides...
{Garth}

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Enchantress
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Canada eh.
1 posted 2005-02-15 02:31 PM


"tenderly sharing moments
of tranquility

that would replace this stale air
that I now breathe....

captured within your gaze
revived in the beauty of your spirit
and warmed from your light

and in your kiss
    finding the first breath
             of new life that I breathe... "

So softly beautiful Donna.
You have captured this feeling perfectly.
~Warm hugs, Nancy~

In the midst of winter,
I found there lives within me..
an invincible summer.

LeeJ
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2 posted 2005-02-15 03:11 PM


boy Donna, this was so very beautiful
I experienced such serentiy while reading
beautiful

inkedgoddess
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3 posted 2005-02-15 03:37 PM


that would replace this stale air
    that I now breathe....


amazing how that person can revive you in one simple breath
much heartfelt over here in your eloquent words about such simple bliss

Ericc
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4 posted 2005-02-15 03:58 PM


Oh wow...!!!

Eric

JL
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5 posted 2005-02-15 04:19 PM


"Sometimes this silence deafens me

just one word.....

   and a longing felt
to hear the song
in your voice
and look into the softness
of eyes that see
      the all of me

tenderly sharing moments
of tranquility"

Beautiful words.
Enjoyed.

JL



Gentle Spirit
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6 posted 2005-02-16 06:49 AM


I want to thank each of you for the kind comments, I surely do appreciate it.  Hugs and peace.  
Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2005-02-17 07:44 AM


quiet is where I spend
my dream dollars
alone is lovley
when you let your mind
enjoy the shimmering
of the steal bars

enjoyed you here D


Gentle Spirit
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8 posted 2005-02-17 07:51 AM


Sometimes, alone can be very lovely Dark, indeed.  Thanks for the softness of your soul this morning hon, needed that..  Hugs.
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just out of reach
9 posted 2005-02-17 09:53 AM


Absolutely beautiful Donna.
I think this might be a new favourite of yours for me!
hugs, Chris

You said you'd give me light-
But you never told me about the fire
Stevie Nicks

NewEnglandlazurlu
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A Mountain Paradise
10 posted 2005-02-17 09:56 AM


Hi Donna ... I read this several times and loved it more each time! What a wonderful write.

huggles, Marti  

A single sunbeam is enough to drive away many shadows.
–St. Francis of Assisi

Susan Caldwell
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11 posted 2005-02-17 10:33 AM


Donna this is beautiful...

Sometimes when we stop thinking about how bad we want it, it comes to us and gives us exactly what we need before we know it is happening...and only then do we realize that what we lost was so not worth the trouble we spent on it..

I have never lost hope..completely.  

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

passing shadows
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12 posted 2005-02-17 10:39 AM


I'm glad this came back up here...I'd read it earlier and I love it
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13 posted 2005-02-17 10:52 AM


   and a longing felt
to hear the song
in your voice
and look into the softness
of eyes that see
      the all of me

Oh, yes... rebirth... *S* Beautiful write! *S*

Gentle Spirit
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14 posted 2005-02-25 09:05 AM


thanks everyone.  
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