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vandana
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0 posted 2005-02-15 11:30 AM



Don't,
Please don't let me go,
Don't let me be the one,
Don't let me say these words,
Don't let me cry over you,
Don't let me try to say
goodbye,
So don't let me go,
Don't let me go,
Don't let me be sad,
Don't let me feel bad,
Don't let me go,
Please don't let me go,
Feel me,
Touch me,
Then tell me
How do you feel?
Don't let me go,
Don't let me feel sad,
I want you to hold me
In your arms,
Let me feel warm breeze
Into me,
Let me feel nice,
Let me stay,
Let me lay my love for you,
Don't let me go,
Now,
My love,
Your love isn't enough for me,
Come on,
Lay your love on my heart,
So,
Please don't let me go,
Yet,
Don't let me go,

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Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2005-02-15 11:36 AM


VERY nice Vandana!  Lovely.
garysgirl
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2 posted 2005-02-15 11:53 AM


Very good writing, Vandana. I enjoyed reading it.
Hugs,
Ethel

LeeJ
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3 posted 2005-02-15 11:54 AM


a sad but poignant plea....well done
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4 posted 2005-02-15 12:14 PM


I relate to this

good write, very touching

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5 posted 2005-02-17 03:50 PM


LeeJ got to the word first...poignant. Yeah, that's the one.

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6 posted 2005-02-17 04:00 PM


And I was going to use it, too. *S* For it is... poignant... such a touching plea!
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7 posted 2005-02-17 04:06 PM


Dear vandana, you moved me with your plaintif pleas for love. Put please don't give the suject of your adoration too much power. We can lose ourself in the process. I have learned this through my own personal experience. Your writing has been improving by leaps and bounds! It is amazing that English isn't your first language!

Loving hugs,
EA

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8 posted 2005-02-17 04:13 PM


Powerfuly said...and powerfuly felt.
Great job!

Eric

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9 posted 2005-02-17 11:21 PM


Enjoyed...James
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