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Snow
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desert flower looking for rain

0 posted 2005-02-14 10:52 PM




again, another piece from a year ago .. but one i really love. :-)


"i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly"

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-02-14 10:56 PM


Thank you

I wouldn't have found it if you hadn't reposted it, and this is what I'm talking about when I say you have movement in your work --

you captured the rhythm of rails in this, and at first I thought a train, but then, it could also be one of those old wooden-track rollercoasters too.

I enjoyed this much--again.

Snow
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2 posted 2005-02-14 11:02 PM


YOU.....

see so much in my work that goes unseen by others that simply skim or pass by in their hurry to run up their count.. and i don't mean that to offend, but, i've never been one to hold back my honesty.

i can not tell you what a pleasure it is to share my work for someone like you. someone that seriously reads the work that is put here... i'm not looking for a pat on the back. i can get that from the members of my own site. but, that, is exactly why i post outside of there.

thank you. thank you. thank you! for giving me a reason to keep sharing ... because i know there are a few who dig through the layers.... and see and feel and explore the journey i hopefully, take you on.

sincerly,
Snow

"i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly"

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2005-02-15 04:39 AM


Hey.

I paid one price.

so here we go round again.

EvocativeVerse2
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4 posted 2005-02-15 06:29 AM


Love this! Love the comments too. Not being one to care about bumping up my own counter...after all how long have I been a member of this website...and still my counter just peeks over the lip of 1000...lol...I would like to say this does have movement in it. Curves...and by curves we mean so much. Curve of the rails...curve of a spine. Yes I feel the movement. If I could but fall into the lean of the curve...there...I think would be my heaven. Wonderful write milady. Bravo!
Snow
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5 posted 2005-02-15 04:34 PM


sb..... thank you so much for taking another spin *s*  

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kevin, i know you don't care about things like that. *soft smile* and, i know.... without a doubt that you know these corners and how they feel. thank you for everything. love, ~S

"i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly"

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6 posted 2005-02-15 11:18 PM


There aren't very many poems that make me simply stop and look after I've read them, just stare at the words and feel their meaning again from the inside....the list just grew by one.

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froggy
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7 posted 2005-02-26 08:00 PM


I have to agree with everyone else on this piece.
Enjoyed the read.

:-)

Opoetry4me
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8 posted 2005-02-26 10:33 PM


I am kinda slow to catch on, but after reading it over again I can see the ~CURVES~ and I enjoyed. Wonderful piece by the way.
miscellanea
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9 posted 2005-02-27 09:58 AM


Snow,
   Just so you know, there are others out there that see the layers of your work.  When I have read your work, I am too awestruck to find the right words.  Your depth, phrases, images, and  pauses are brilliantly sensual.  (I probably don't respond because I'm a little shy when it comes to sensuality and don't know how to respond.  At the same time, I consider you an outstanding poetess and artist.  You blend the two perfectly.  
            miscellanea

Susan
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10 posted 2005-02-27 01:13 PM


Mmmmmmm - pat on the back? - Lady Snow - you deserve them - I try to encourage all who write - it takes courage to post your heart - and there are many passionate and talented poets here- then there are the sprouts just beginning to grow - this is where I started - I think I'm beginning to flesh out - but still, I wait to blossom - you, my dear, you blossom - and it is the depth, the layers, the pause that your work carries that speaks to many - especially to me - sorry if your shoulder gets sore (teehee)

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2005-02-27 03:24 PM


you speak for me in so many of your creations...and it is your layouts and backgrounds that add so much more to your words.

Don't ever think that those who just leave a  smile or a sigh or a simple gesture to show they have read you aren't delving into your feelings. Some of us  may not have the words to describe how you make us feel when we finish reading you.

I am very sincere~~as I am sure are the others. It is our way of showing you that we read and enjoy you.

M

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12 posted 2005-02-28 07:05 AM


This seems a little different..i dont know...thank you anyway...

Goldenrose.

Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.)

littlewing
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13 posted 2005-02-28 08:55 PM


see?

the desert flower . . . it is she . . . this reminded me of one's hands running along her skin, smooth as a rail.

beautiful.

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14 posted 2005-06-17 09:12 AM


A challenge from Ed -- spend a moment today, thinking about how we should treat a good person who is one of PiP's finest poets....if not this one, then one of your choice....it seems we need to.
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