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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2005-02-13 07:37 AM


My daughter shook the salt and asked,
"Mom, is this stuff good?"
she saw my grin begin a crawl
across my face misunderstood
as I bellowed
"Don't ya know?
Salt was once a dead sea snow
deviling the Sodom eggs
and rendering a sea bequeathed
of nothing, nothing, ever dreamed
above the tides of peppering
'fish will not lay eggs'
beneath
the tide of their own eulogy
as She turned and burned the deep
into the brine of all her grief
of what she'd left behind..."

My daughter shook her head and asked,
"But, this stuff, does it go bad?"
"No," I kissed her head and said,
"but some will try to tell you so"

sprinkle me
some dead sea soup
and let the lady live again
for it was for
a glimpse of truth
that the woman was reviled
as she glanced behind to see
the passions of them die
as she
cried the waters dry
and screamed
as sand poured from her eyes
for youth
and all she'd never be again

"Yeah, but is that good?"

I sighed.

I told her that I think too much,
and maybe I could use a touch,
so pass the salt to me,
you see?
For her, I toss a pinch
and glimpse
over my left ways...


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2005-02-13 08:17 AM


I told her that I think too much,
and maybe I could use a touch,
so pass the salt to me,
you see?
For her, I toss a pinch
and glimpse
over my left ways...

~*~

Dang...
My muse is nowhere to be found
but yours is
riding
high.

Midnitesun
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2 posted 2005-02-13 10:31 AM


absolutely brilliant!

tossing a handful, as I stroll away smiling at the depths your mind 'seas'  

Susan
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3 posted 2005-02-13 10:55 AM


Enjoyed the scene painted here and the thougths - smiling - most enjoyed

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Margherita
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4 posted 2005-02-13 11:18 AM


Wow, what you have been able to create just with a basis of some grains of salt!

Excellent!

Love, Margherita

Magnus
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5 posted 2005-02-13 12:41 PM


Karen,  I have to agree..your muse is riding
VERY high.  This is superb writing.

Ericc
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6 posted 2005-02-13 01:23 PM


Wow...excellent write!

Eric

Dark Angel
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7 posted 2005-02-13 02:36 PM


YOU, m'lady...are Poetica!

Magnificent writing....as always

Mxx

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

Martie
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8 posted 2005-02-13 02:52 PM


Karen....Food for thought in that soup of yours...thank you, it's delicious!  
serenity blaze
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9 posted 2005-02-13 05:22 PM


Hey now, all this talk about my muse riding "high" might give some folks the wrong impression about me.

.

.

.

Oh alright, so I had a teeny bit of a buzz.

Just whiskey, Ma, I swear.

And this was indeed inspired by an actual conversation with my daughter. *chuckle* I rarely answer questions simply, and yep, sometimes they just don't bother to ask me at all.

Thanks for reading folks. I do love this place.

iliana
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10 posted 2005-02-13 05:43 PM


Brilliant. Oh, how I understand.  Do you know that every one of your poems I read goes straight to my library?!  I really wish I had a hard copy, my lady.  Each poem is a gift.   .....jo
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11 posted 2005-02-13 07:13 PM


Great write!

~Alli~

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jwesley
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12 posted 2005-02-13 08:26 PM


Absoutely terrific, my friend...great piece.

jwesley

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