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DavePage
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0 posted 2005-02-11 03:45 PM


You can read this taking the line position on each verse to the same position in the next verse to read so you read up and down (three dimensional) with chorus or you can read it straight through.

Dave


Long table Matriarch presiding
All as it should be
All as determined
Meal eaten as wolves
For what else
Were they

Human in form concentrating
Less alarm should interfere
With the feed
People eaten as politics
For what else
Were they

Banners raised as Patricians determined
In thoughts that would defeat
In peace not blood
Of bloodmeat served and sewn in ideas
For what else
Were they


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iliana
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1 posted 2005-02-11 03:48 PM


Cool, Dave!  I like to play with writing in ways like this, too.  Good one!   ....jo
DavePage
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2 posted 2005-02-11 04:41 PM


Thanks Jo

regards

Dave

Opoetry4me
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3 posted 2005-02-11 05:18 PM


I like this Dave!
      
         ~~Dara Beth~~

DavePage
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4 posted 2005-02-11 05:22 PM


Thanks Dara.

Dave

JL
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5 posted 2005-02-11 06:04 PM


Excellent Dave!
Enjoyed this too.

JL


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6 posted 2005-02-11 06:39 PM


Thanks JL.

Dave

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